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The Diary of Camp Better Place Station Author Migdalia Torres
GENRES: Mystery, Drama
The Diary of Camp Better Place Station Author Migdalia Torres
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STAY OR BE DISPLAYED AT THE NEXT CAMP BETTER PLACE SPORT GAMES
LOGLINE - Welcome to Camp this Summer. Where you will encounter the Bloodiest Sports events of this Century. Camp Better Place Station a Runaway RV Haven for Teen Runaways located in the beautiful Colorado Mountains where it's peaceful and serene. Come join us in this Mystery/Suspense Thriller where the Runaway Teens learn the hard way how to win there Blood Sports Medallion.
The Dairy of Camp Better Place Station is about the Free RV Homes given out to Teen Runaways, but what a prize to pay. A young girl by the Name of India Del Cielo, is soon caught up in the most "Bloodiest Trial" a would be Camping Recruiter could ever encounter.
India, as she was better known finds out that Camp Facilities are more than just a Drug Haven and Oasis for misfortune teens that had been picked up by the Elders in the Streets of New York, Los Angles, and Mexico.
India begins to suspect of the campground's owners Ms. Annie Meyers and Mr. Joseph Santiago once her friends begin to show up dead one by one with a Blood Sports Medallion wrapped around their necks., it was now time to begins to write a "Diary", of each and every murder that took place on the outer skirts of Indian Joe's Camping Grounds.
India's Diary would soon lead, in obtaining Information that would be vital in the "Privately Funded Camping Grounds".
Old Detective Joseph Meyers befriends the frighten teenager and share his personal opinion of the Drug Haven RV Trailers Camping Grounds, which he himself had shut down years ago.
It is now time to bring your "Backpacks and Camping Equipment for your stay at Indian Joe's Hunting Grounds"."It had become evident that once you arrive you could never leave again. If you try to make a run for you surely wouldn't make it pass those heavily armed gates at the entrance. You would first have to go thru Indian Joe's Hunting Grounds, to see if you could make it out alive.
Indian Joe's Hunting Grounds were better known as the Camps Trails of Blood which, would lead you right into the hands of the Indian Grounds Murderer.
Happy Camping everyone this upcoming Camping season. Welcome to Camp this Summer. Where you will encounter the Bloodiest Sports Events of this Century.
As for Camp Better Place Station, a Drug Haven Oasis for Teen Runaways located in the beautiful Colorado Mountains would soon go hand in hand when it comes to Indian Joe's Navajo Reservation.
Come join us in this Mystery/Suspense Thriller where the Runaway Teens learn the hard way how to win there Life back or a Blood Sports Medallion. What Camp Better Place Station had in store for you would make you think twice before staying here.
