My first script and I am wondering what you all think. Uploaded PDF under Loglines.
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Sorry I meant for the post to read My first feature length, its 120 pages just dropped the first 11 pages to get a feel from everyone.
Your script has a fantastic first paragraph. I was visually excited. Then, the setup/story fell apart with VO and non-stop talking. Page after page of talking heads. I stopped reading at page 6.
Mm must take a look ..
Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate you all taking time to read it. It is great having a place like this to get honest feedback.