What's Gemini Skin? "When seductive bisexual philanthropist with hidden habits, falls in love with a wild lesbian full of lust and sarcasm, leads to an unforgettable road trip revealing secrets from the past and a socking truth no one ever suspected"
Screenwriting : GEMINI SKIN is a Semi-Finalists for the Circus Road Screenplay Contest 2014 by Maria Blanco H.
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Big Congrats Maria!!
Congratulations on the Placement, Maria.
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Maria, that's not the logline we worked on....
Congrats on your achievement! But if you want my opinion (not that you've asked for it!) that logline is a bit clumsy. So forgive me for suggesting a variation: A bisexual philanthropist with a dark secret finds herself on a wild and life-changing roadtrip with a new lover. The past must be faced as they struggle with the consequences of a shocking revelation.
Thank you for your comments and suggestions. Sometimes you need to hear from other to know if you're in the right path. The original log line was this one, let me know if you think this works better. "A woman undergoing chemo tells her children the story about her wild past with a lesbian lover, when they seek her out, it leads to an unforgettable road trip revealing past secrets and the socking truth no one ever suspected"
Since DManus seems to be your mentor (and is a smart guy), I'll leave the comments to him. I'll simply say that this one is better, by me, altho you keep typo-ing "shocking."
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Congrats to you!
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This is the winner log line: "A bisexual philanthropist with a dark secret finds herself on a wild and life-changing road trip with a former lover that forces them both to face their past and the consequences of a shocking revelation" Let's hear it =)
Hey Maria, thanks for the compliment. If I'd known the cancer backstory I might have included that in the logline though! So the mother with cancer is the bisexual philanthropist? Also Danny might know a bit more about this stuff than I do ;)
I just know her story a bit better. but I think that logline works!
Thanks Danny. I'm relatively new at this (long time pro writer but newbie screenwriter) so still finding my way.
Normally I would agree but if a story isn't commercial or high concept, you need to highlight the most commercial and understandable aspects of it. and I think this last version teases that.
That's a good point, Danny.