Screenwriting : GaryTown by Seth Nelson

Seth Nelson


Hello Writers,  I'm looking for feedback on my logline and 2 page flip synopsis of GaryTown season 1..  Which one do you like better?  Matt protagonist or Seth protagonist?  Thank you in advance for reading. Matt Pro: A successful podcaster reunites with a job hopping jingle writer and exposes his prankster brother’s true identity. Seth Pro: A job hopping jingle writer reunites with a successful podcaster who exposes his prankster brother’s true identity.

Roxanne Paukner

It sounds like a buddy-show, so why not have two protagonists? Obviously they can alternate between episodes. As far as the loglines go, I guess I like the second slightly better. (?) They were both a bit confusing before I read the synopsis.

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Seth Nelson

yes it is episodic and written more like bullet points but similar to a show like Letterkenny.

William G Chandler Jr

This seems like it has possibilities. The problem is the presentation from of the loglines and synopsis need to be more linear. The knee surgery before and after can lead to some seriously good stuff. It just needs to be a little more linear.

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