I've recently received my story notes back for my script. It's a long story, so I'll get to the point. One of the points made in the notes went like this: "The ending is ineffective. It doesn't feel right to have the child die and then cobble together some sort of delayed redemption. It just doesn't fit the story at all and is very unsatifying." Okay so in the script the main character (Raven) she's a criminal trying to break her and her daughter out of that dangerous life. Because of her refusal to listen to good advice to get out of that life before something happened to her or her daughter, her daughter ends up getting killed anyway. Later she has another child. I wanted my main character to receive the consequence for her actions but I also wanted her to learn her lesson and end up with a second chance because everyone deserves a chance to get it right. My question is, was the child's death too much of a consequence for audiences even though there is a happy ending?