I'm doing some final prep before sharing my TV pilot on here and Script Revolution. I've been sent some loglines as part of feedback but feel like they make my comedy sound like a drama.
I've read up on any advice I could find but most talk about condensing your story into 25 words or below. I wanted something that sounded snappier. I like playing with words and ideally would like my logline to be a joke itself. Has anyone seen that before?
I thought I'd share my personal attempt at a logline to see what you thought.
Logline: On a plane, everyone can hear you scream! An aviophobic pilots quest to fly again.