Screenwriting : Pitch Feedback by Joe Aloisi

Joe Aloisi

Pitch Feedback

Has anyone had a positive experience or feedback from any of the people Stage 32 provides for written pitch’s? I’ve enrolled in a couple so far & it seems they want detailed descriptions of how the story flows but having it limited to 2 pages, it makes it a little challenging.

Doug Nelson

Learn to write tight.

Jimmy Kelly

I'd be happy to help out with feedback and preparing for pitches

Gustavo Freitas

I'm also curious to hear the success stories from pitching at Stage 32.

Joe Aloisi

Writing tight seemed to be my problem. Matt Kniaz, who I pitched to, wanted a character breakdown & back story so he could better understand where everyone fits in. There’s no way I would be able to include that & describe the critical story outline. I’ll work on it though. Thanks everyone for your feedback & support

Tracey Lynn Lloyd

I got good feedback from an agent, and he asked to see my script. I’m now thinking of all the things I want to change about the script, but that’s par for the course

Matthew Barker

My pet hate (and I mean I loathe it with a passion) is writing a pitch or a synopsis. It goes against everything I love in writing. It’s absolutely necessary, and I need to get better at it, but I sure hate doing it.

Bryn Chamberlain

I think that's the hallmark of good writing; less is more. Being able to compress a 120 page screenplay down to one page, one paragraph, one line shows a proficiency with the craft. That and editing. it's not the writing, it's the re-writing.

Allen Roughton - Stage 32 Script Services

I coordinate the pitching on Stage 32 and have seen literally thousands of scorecards/feedback and there are tons of positive comments, but you have to keep in mind that when giving feedback it isn't as helpful to focus on what is already working as it is to focus on what can be improved.

If you get "positive" feedback on a script but whoever is reading it has zero interest in the project, then the feedback isn't helpful. I'd want to know what their hangups were, even if it was just that the project wasn't their taste.

In terms of boiling a story down to 2 pages, it can be super tough, but is a skill you have to craft as a writer because you'll be compacting your story for pitches your entire career. You have to be as ready when someone gives you a couple minutes to get out your idea, as you would be if they gave you 30 minutes. Just like screenwriting itself, it's a craft that takes lots of practice.

Robert W. Jackson

Allen, thank you for the enlightening post. I can see where condensing a story into a three minute pitch is important. I'm just learning how to screen write.

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