Screenwriting : Transitions? by Dylan McKenzie

Dylan McKenzie

Transitions?

Hello! I'm currently writing a web series and seem to have hit a snag (as we all do now and again). I'll try to explain as best I can. Basically, I have a Cafe manager interviewing people to work for him. The interviews are short and going terribly for the manager. How should I go about formatting the cuts to the different interviews? They're all in the same location so I don't see any need for a new Slug-line. Any advice would be much appreciated!

Alex Stitt

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Debbie Croysdale

I would show the disconcerted frown on the Managers face before switching to the next interview. (Simple advice I realise, but necessary for audience to sense the innate boredom and intellectual frustration). Or no frown but eyeballs looking to ceiling, then next see next candidate. Or do a scene where Manager thinking of something else completely, eg A back flash to his last sexual encounter, while Joe Soap is reciting his CV in the chair opposite.

Patrick M McCormick

How about: X is conducting a series of interviews in his office. They are going badly. INTERVIEW 1 INTERVIEW 2 INTERVIEW 3 Embellish it anyway you need to.

Dylan McKenzie

Thanks for all your help! However, would you be able to elaborate further on how exactly that should look on the page, Alex?

Anthony Moore

I would do a montage. MONTAGE -- Well dressed man shaking hands. Interviewer looking bored. -- Well dressed woman talking. Interviewer yawns. -- Badly dressed man laughing. Interviewer looks insulted. -- Goth woman gives interviewer the finger. -- Interviewer throws out man wearing a toga. Then I would start the next scene with a "real" candidate.

Bill Costantini

Are we hearing them talk? If so, it's not a montage nor a series of shots. It would go like this. INT. JOE'S OFFICE - DAY Joe at his desk across from APPLICANT ONE, Male (25), Purple-shirt, yellow-tie, wild-eyed and trembling. JOE So what makes you cut out for this job? APPLICANT ONE I'm a real people person. Next up, APPLICANT TWO, Female (25), Militant, hostile and glaring. JOE You don't have anything written in the work experience section of your application. APPLICANT TWO Just tell me when I start. Next up, APPLICANT THREE, Male (25), Long-haired rocker, headphoned and playing air drums. JOE Have you worked in a cafe before? APPLICANT THREE What, man? JOE (louder) Have you worked in a cafe before? APPLICANT THREE No, but I like food, man. And drums. LATER, Alone, Joe rips up their applications. Good luck, bro!

Dylan McKenzie

Thanks Bill, your comment was exactly what I was looking for. Thanks to everyone else too, I can use those tips in future! :)

Alex Stitt

See you've got it sorted, courtesy of Bill. Good luck with it. Lx

Debbie Croysdale

Hi I agree with Dylan, Bill has shot into the plot his usual charisma injection!

Dan Guardino

It doesn’t make any difference if the scenes take place at the same location. If they take place at different times you need to use a slug line for each scene so the director knows a transition takes place. INT. CAFÉ OFFICE – DAY Blah, Blah, Blah... INT. CAFÉ OFFICE – LATER Blah, Blah, Blah... INT. CAFÉ OFFICE – LATER Blah, Blah, Blah...

Linda Perkins

Depending on what you want to reflect...dialogue or just action...in which Bill or Anthony's suggestion will work for you. Much success!

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