Screenwriting : Writing a flashback montage with same location by Krista Crawford

Krista Crawford

Writing a flashback montage with same location

How should I format a scene where it's a flashback montage of one person using pickup lines on another person, same setting just different times? It's basically a montage of one person coming into work everyday, using a new pickup line on another coworker. I only want to do about 3-4 beats in the montage but given that it's the same location/setting but different days, I wasn't sure on the formatting of that. Would something like this be okay?

FLASHBACK MONTAGE - VANCE HITTING ON WALLACE

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance sticks her head around the half wall.

VANCE

Hey Wallace! (Insert pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work.

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance leans around the half wall

VANCE

Hey Wallace! (Insert second pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance crawls past the half wall

VANCE

Hey Wallace! (Insert third pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work

END FLASHBACK

Marty Howe

for my flashback scenes, I added "when" it happened.

FLASHBACK MONTAGE - VANCE HITTING ON WALLACE

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance sticks her head around the half wall. (3 months earlier)

VANCE

Hey Wallace! (Insert pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work.

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance leans around the half wall

VANCE

(2 weeks earlier)

Hey Wallace! (Insert second pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work

-- WALLACE'S CUBICLE -- Vance crawls past the half wall

VANCE (3 days ago)

Hey Wallace! (Insert third pickup line)

Wallace rolls eyes and continues to work

END FLASHBACK

Barry John Terblanche

Try using a narrative?

Ismael Judá Moraes Reis Dias

I recommend watching Memento by Christopher Nolan.

Nick Assunto - Stage 32 Script Services Coordinator

This sounds like it's a cut to gag in the script, like it's setup through dialogue and then we see it fast, so I'd probably go do CUT TO:, SLUG - LATER, scene bit, SLUG - LATER, scene bit, SLUG - LATER, scene bit, CUT BACK TO:

Marty Howe

you would LATER 3 times in a row?

Nick Assunto - Stage 32 Script Services Coordinator

It’s a half a page worth of bits tops. It shouldn’t be difficult to track or assume context with “later”. So yeah. I’d use it three times in a row there.

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