Screenwriting

From structure to content to representation to industry trends, this is the place to discuss, share content and offer tips and advice on the craft and business of screenwriting

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy
It’s been a very productive week.

Do you have a plan to move your career goals forward, and are you setting aside the time to create new content?

This week, the following things happened.

1) I sent an actor a newly completed screenplay, and he liked it. He’s agreed to attach his name to the project, and my producer is currently revie...

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Maurice Vaughan

Thanks, Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy. I appreciate it.

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

Maurice: If you wouldn't mind providing the link or instructions, how do you get into this Victory Round on Clubhouse? Thanks

Maurice Vaughan

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy, here's the link: https://www.clubhouse.com/event/PN58LLOG?utm_medium=ch_event&utm_campaign=cuygt2pxPnqv16TMedInBQ-321752

You download the Clubhouse app and join the room. Yo...

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Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

Thanks. I think I'm hooked up.

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy. Ok, cool!

Opinions...

I am thinking about deleting my logline "A Voice to be Heard." I am in works of the comic of it. But I feel it's not being appreciated on here. I am really liking the comic I am developing so far. I don't know what to do. What's the point, if people don't appreciate. Should I keep it up here or dele...

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Claudio Torres

In screenwriting you always received feedback, notes and comments. It is an important part of the job. There is no positive or negative notes. Theyare always part of the work. You get a person opnion,...

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Colette "ByFilms" Byfield

Alexandria Smith I completely agree with Claudio. I haven’t read your logline but the main point is to learn to handle FEEDBACK maturely. If someone has insulted you then please let me know and I will...

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Martin Reese

Great points by Claudio. You will always get criticism. You take what helps and discard the rest. That's just part of the business. And loglines are not easy. Keep pushing.

Alexandria Smith

To everyone: I want to thank you all for being helpful! As a person with autism who is extremely sensitive about a lot of things. It's not easy for me. But I am still trying even though it is very hard (especially when it's negative)

Leticia Agudo

I second Claudio and Colette here (more like third and fourth by this time). Also, take into account that not everyone knows (professional editors, execs, etc included) how to give feedback or critici...

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Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy
14 things to know about writing screenplays

Every few years, I post my philosophy about being a screenwriter. Maybe some of these will resonate with you. 

1. Screenwriting isn't for you if you're a delicate, sensitive woodland creature.

2. Don't tell anyone This is your first script. But don't hang your hopes on setting the world on fire becau...

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Gen Vardo

I like 6: In a way it's like a painter fresh out of art college. They can be painting for years, producing good or even great works, but nothing selling.

Then they find their style, their voice.

All it takes is time and confidence, and the fourteen.

Roberta M Roy

Nice list, CJ. I'll take #12.

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

CJ: Thanks for creating 14 things to know about writing screenplays, light. However, I'm offering my observations without concern about being diplomatic. If that offends someone, they may wish to reread number one consider growing a thicker skin.

Roberta M Roy

I love the balance of the spectrum of your perspectives Philip and CJ.

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

Roberta: Glad to hear it. Best of luck with your endeavors will always lend eyes and ears.

J.a. Fludd
Act breaks in a streaming pilot

Hi, everyone. I thought I’d stick my head in here for a little question. I’m closing in on finishing an hour-long dramedy pilot that I imagine pitching to a streaming network like Apple or Hulu. I’ve been writing it as if I were writing a pilot for a network show and thus including a teaser and act...

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Maurice Vaughan

Thanks, E Langley. Yeah, I agree with you about considering where the writer projects the story will land.

Emily J

I recently had a call with an exec about my pilot script, which does not include act breaks, and we talked about this very thing! You should totally remove the act breaks (or at least have two version...

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Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

I do teasers but not act breaks in pilots.

Dan MaxXx

Dont think act breaks/no act breaks matter for reads.

WGF posts actual scripts of tv shows on networks & streamers. Everyone employed formats pages differently.

https://www.wgfoundation.org/blog/2020/4...

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Drew Warren Delaine

If you feel your story is ready let it tell itself that's it you'll do great.

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy
Tone in Film Noir

I went online to research screenplay tone, particularly related to the film noir genre, and found some great explanations:

First, let me offer this excellent definition of screenplay tone.

In a screenplay, the tone is the most elusive element. It doesn't necessarily have a physical form on the page b...

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Dan MaxXx

Tone and world of plot should be established by end of page 1.

Stephanie Madison

I think the definition you included sums up tone pretty well.

When you mentioned film noir, Orson Welles, etc., I immediately thought of films like 'Citizen Kane' and 'The Maltese Falcon' starring Hum...

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Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy

Stephanie: Thanks for the suggestion for Black Spot. I've watched a few Nordic Noir, and their climate is a good backdrop for a bleak setting. I particularly liked The Vahalla Murders.

Doug Nelson

Dan M - I think that's pretty true, but I also want to know who (character) I'm supposed to be routing for - I'll give you twelve eights. I also look for some conflict, so maybe I'll go the end of page 2.

Stephanie Madison

No problem, Phil. Thanks for the suggestion--I'll check it out. Cheers.

Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy
Screenplay Tone

Here's another article tying into what I posted yesterday. Newer screenwriters may want to have a look. https://freshmenscreenplay.com/screenwriting-tone/#:~:text=What%20is%20%.......

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Screenwriting Tone: The Definitive Guide
Screenwriting Tone: The Definitive Guide
In this post, you will learn everything you need to know about screenwriting tone. What is Tone? Why is it important? How you create it? How to determine tone other scripts and films. I've created thi…
Maurice Vaughan

Great article and share, Phillip "Uncle Phil" Hardy. I do a tone check during rewrites to make sure the tone is consistent throughout the script.

Maurice Vaughan
NEW BLOG: "Coffee & Content: Cinematography of STRANGER THINGS & How to Write Better"

Two great videos in the Stage 32 blog:

"Stranger Things Cinematography Breakdown — A Nostalgic Approach to Lighting, Camera, & Lenses"

"Write better dialogue in 8 minutes"

https://www.stage32.com/blog/coffee-content-cinematography-of-stranger-t......

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Maurice Vaughan
"How Stage 32 Benefits Mobile Filmmakers with Rich RB Botto"

Check out this podcast on SBP Podcast Mobile Filmmaking! Stage 32's founder and CEO, Richard "RB" Botto, is the guest (https://www.stage32.com/rb). SOOOOO many tips for writers, producers, directors, actors, etc.

https://www.podpage.com/sbp-podcast-mobile-filmmaking/how-stage-32-benef......

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How Stage 32 Benefits Mobile Filmmakers with Rich RB Botto
How Stage 32 Benefits Mobile Filmmakers with Rich RB Botto
Episode 74It's true that the industry of film and television is changing. That needs no convincing to see.Our guest in episode 74 of the SBP Podcast Mobile Filmmaking is Rich RB Botto, the founder and…
Amanda Toney
Netflix + Stage 32 Free Webinar: How to Write Hit Drama TV for Streaming Platforms

Hi everyone, I'm excited to bring in a producer & writer from BRIDGERTON to teach the final installment of our education series with Netflix. Here's all the details - be sure to register: https://www.stage32.com/webinars/Netflix-%20-Stage-32-Present-How-to-Wri......

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Ahmed Hayat Khan

I want to thank you for your work. I am also looking forward for this webinar. You are remarkable job. It is really nice to work with you Amanda Toney

Emma Crookes

Hello from Bath, England. I’m so looking forward to this.

Thank you

Irene Reis Leite

Hi everybody!!!! Watching and learning from Porto, Portugal :-)

Kathy Jean

Good afternoon from Peoria, Illinois!

Jonathan Eric Peterson

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John Forbes

Hey everyone -- looking forward to this presentation . . .

Uju Odiah

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Rev Deborah Bishop

Hi all I'm Rev Deb Bishop, excited to be here!

Balarama Munoz Medina

Hello My name is Balarama Munoz, i am filmaker and director from Chile

Vikram Bhandari

Hey Filmmaker from Germany! Excited to connect with creatives around the globe.

Keith Dury

Hello from NewBrunswick Canada! :)

Natalia Cruz

Hi, my name is Natalia. Anyone else from Vancouver, Canada?

Luiza Paniagua

Hiiii! I'm Luiza Paniagua and i'm from Brazilll ! Very anxious with this webinar!

Francesca Varisco

Hi everyone! Francesca here, looking forward to the presentation!

Kathi Carey

Sooooo looking forward to this -- outlining a drama pilot now!

Jerry Jaz

No drama in writing, but selling writing, well….

Kerry F Booth

Welcome, everyone. Tuning in from Denver, CO

Denise Crisci

Hi. I'm hoping for great information!

Danielle Boone

Looking forward to hearing from Leila. She was awesome in the pitch tank last week :)

Hania Sherwani

Hi!! my name is Hania. I'm a film student. Very excited for this seminar

Diane Namm

Hi. Looking forward to hearing what Leila has to say! Thanks for arranging this!

Janet S Blake

Happy to join this webinar!

Ayn Carrillo Gailey

Thanks so much. @ayngailey from Orcas Island/LA

Dominika Gniewek

Hello! Best wishes from Cambridge! I have been really looking forward to this webinar :)

Daria Woszek

hello everyone!

Lise Rask

Excited for this webinar :-)

Casey Williams

Hey everyone! I'm Casey from Calgary, AB! So excited for this!

Donald Jacobs

So looking forward to this session

Trisha Evans-Lutterodt

Hi everyone, I'm Trisha, an aspiring screenwriter, and director from London, UK. Lovely to meet you all!

Marcin Klinkosz

Hi everyone!

Patricia Lamwaka

Hello Everyone

Eric Mofford

Glad to be here

Yolanda Lewis

Hello from Atlanta

Sam Felman

Looking forward to meeting everyone! / @SamFelman / www.SamFelman.com / Director and Production Designer

Omowumi Ogunsola

I'm so fascinated about this. Looks interesting already. I'm Vicky, from Johannesburg South Africa

Anastasia Yules

Looking forward to this. Greetings from Sheffield, UK :)

Sajani Fernando

Hi! I'm super excited for this!

Johnatas Costa

Hello from Brazil! :)

Armelle Lajus

Hi from London!

Anna Fong

Hi! New here, nice to meet everyone

Diana T Black

Thank you RB, Amanda, and of course, Leila... these are really valuable presentations...

Oliwia Bednarek

Hello Warsaw ! Maybe is smb here :)

Jeff Shelby

Hi all - I'm in cold, dreary MN. :)

Camille Elston

Hey everyone! I'm here from Riverside, looking forward to the webinar!

Fawaz Azim

Very excited! Name is Fawaz. and joining the webinar from Toronto

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Ashley Owens

Hi ALL! I’m super excited about today! Nice to “meet” everyone.

Jana Sprau

Hello from Germany!

Mike Wilczynski

Hello from Chicagoland.

Reneasha Lawrence

Hi, looking forward to this from Trinidad and Tobago.

Alastair Swartz

Hello, Alex tuning from Cape Town :)

Bukola Iji

Hi all

Georgia Lepore

Hi everybody from Roma!

Kirsty Moss

Hi there from sunny Edinburgh!

Rebecca Gismondi

Hi everyone, tuning in from Toronto, Canada!

Guillermo Valerdi Chalate

Hello from Stockholm, Sweden

Nosipo Matanzima

Hi there, am so looking forward to this.

Svetlana Tulasi

Hi everyone! Loved Chris Mack's Netflix workshop, excited for this one too! Svetlana (IG: @svetlanatulasi)

Melva Akens

Greetings from Atlanta!

Svet Doytch

Hello from Montreal!

Steven Delisi

hello from Chicago! … musician & aspiring screenwriter :)

Maurice Vaughan

Hi, everyone. I'm Maurice, a Community Thought Leader in the Screenwriting lounge. Looking forward to meeting you.

Ruben Varela

Excellent

Staton Rabin

Hi, I'm a working screenwriter and a freelance script analyst. Also write YA novels for Simon & Schuster. Never stop learning.

Wendy Pfeifle

Excited to learn today! Hi from Los Angeles!

Joanna AY

Hello from Nottingham, UK. Great to see everyone :)

Lucie Page

Hey from Toronto!

Hannah Scott

Hello from Toronto!!

Pritts Castor

Hi, everyone, from Manila, Philippines!

Nancy Meyer

Hi all from Charleston, SC.

Evangelist Keoagile

Hello all. From Botswana, Africa

Ebony Franklin

Hi, im a film student from Manchester :)

Justin Narthuna

Hello From Italy

Defne Su

Hello Hello!!!

Pam Tan

Hi Everyone!

Shanra Jean Kehl

Hi Everyone from sunny Santa Monica.

Dominika Gniewek

Hello everyone! I am so excited about this webinar!

Derek Johnson II

Hello everyone

Colette "ByFilms" Byfield

Welcome everyone! I’m sure this will be another great Netflix + Stage 32 session!

Ish Ferris

Hey from the UK!

Carla Mejia

Hi - Carla Mejia from new york city!

Luis Aponte Grimaldo

Hello from Lima, Peru!

Deke Acosta

Hi all from Puerto Rico!

James Norris

Anyone wanting to Link "up", I'm at https://www.linkedin.com/in/pjamesnorris/. I write teleplays, short stories, and novels.

Alexander Gerlach

Hi, I'm Alex from Berlin, Germany. I am so excited!

Ashley Owens

Hi! Everyone! Coming from NYC. Super excited to “meet” you all today.

Nicole F. Burney

Hello everyone from New Jersey.

Tricia Cerrone

Hey everyone! Pens at the ready!

Joni Rodgers

Peace and grooviness to all :)

Lori Watt

Hi from Vancouver, BC

Marquita Owens Robinson

Hello. Marquita Owens Robinson from Atlanta Georgia. www.imdb.me/marquitaowensrobinson

Raphael Bittencourt

Hi all! Brazilian writer-director-producer based in LA here! Great to see you all!

James Pierson

Hi, James from England

Opute C. Joel

Hi everyone...

My name is Opute C. Joel. I am a filmmaker based in Nigeria. Good to connect with you guys

Lucas Zoppi

Hi everyone from Buenos Aires!

Surina Nel

Hi I am Surina from South Africa

Summer Rona

Would love to connect @summerrona https://www.linkedin.com/feed/

Just moved from New York to Pacific Palisades, CA

Samuel Tracton

Hello everyone! Hello from Pennsylvania!

Gary Feld

hi all from Alexandria, Virginia

Sally Clements

Hi from Ireland! Loved Awkward!

Adamu Adamu

Good morning from San Diego!

Muhammad Saqib

Greetings everyone from Karachi, Pakistan

Isaac Dil

Hola! from South Africa

Zachary Fox

Good evening from London, UK!

Sandeep Gupta

hi, theoretically a screenwriter here : ) around LA

Mayra Belén Leiva

Hello from Córdoba, Argentina

Naail Ishaq

Hello, from England. Is this webinar recorded and able to be viewed later?

Tim Wright

Greetings all from Dallas via Detroit

Karen "Kay" Ross

Greetings, y'all! I'm Kay, the Community Manager here at Stage 32, tuning in from Los Angeles - WELCOME! Be sure to hit that REFRESH button on your web browser to read the newest comments on this thread!

Amari Grant

Hey y'all I'm a screenwriter in Maryland. Let's connect on IG: cr8tivemari

Laura Van Der Zee

Hi everyone!

Sallona Ramesh

Hello everyone! Greetings from Germany :)

Jillian Del Rosario

Hello to everyone! I'm Jini from the Philippines :))

Robert A Douglas

Hello everyone. Thanks to Stage 32 for this learning opportunity.

Søren Jonia Nissen

Hello from Denmark :-)

David China Woolf

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Carrie Hayes

Hello from the Garden State! So glad to be here.

Arzaneira Deepsri

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Anastasia Pisklyukova

Hi everyone, I'm producer & line producer working in Berlin, also aspiring script writer, developing a coming of age tv series atm.

Jermaine Johnson

Hi, everyone! I am Jermaine from Jamaica.

Tanmay Tushar

This is my handle if anyone wants to connect! Filmmaker and Film student @tanmaybetheone - Instagram

Phiwa Sukumane

Hello from Pretoria , South Africa

Agnieszka Baczkowska-Maśluszczak

I just realized I hate drama. Yikes. :-D

Raksha Thakur

Hi! Comedian and writer! Thanks!

Fahd Aldajani

Greetings from Riyadh, Saudi Arabia! good to see you again!

Jason Dallas

Hi there! Jason from Burbank!

Oriana Theola Nair

Hey Everyone!!! I'm Oriana and I'm from South Africa

Alice Militaru

unfortunately it's late and I have to go, I will watch it after when available. Nite nite

Olga Kozhema

Really hope it will help me as I'm a bit stuck right now:)

Joy Mamey

Hey everybody - I'm a Lebanese, cancer surviving comedian and writer in LA! @joymamey

MoMo Matsunyane

Super excited! MoMo from Johannesburg.

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Tamesha Edwards

Hello everyone! I am from California... Thank you, Stage 32 for this great experience...