Screenwriting : Help (beginner writer) by Jackie Jimenez

would this be considered a logline After being kidnapped for 2 years, a clumsy but clever bank teller must fight off a great deal of villians to save his loved ones along with the city he loves. Will he be able to fight off the darkness that is not brewing within him?

start with your main story, then add the character's.

I like your logline Jackie! I don't think you need the question at the end because you want us to ask and answer that stuff on our own. :) I am also confused by the phrase "A great deal of villains" Is your main character fighting group of villains like a super hero in a comic book? The fact that he is a clumsy bank teller makes me really interested in your story because I love underdogs. (like Forrest Gump) I am nobody, just a new screenwriter learning as I go, but when I write, I see a character, a main plot and a conflict. I will "see" the character, what their wearing, how they talk, even a quirky detail about them, then I give them a problem. The Screenwriter's Bible by David Trottier helps me when I get stuck, but for me I write like Fiona said, the characters come first. Good luck, you've got a great start!

"Following a 2 year imprisonment, a bungling bank teller fights to save all he loves while battling the darkness around him." Thought I'd help break it down a bit for you! :) and welcome aboard!

@genna thank you and @dawn thank you

Hi Jackie, I'm a producer, not a writer (and I consult on the side). There are a lot of screenwriting books, but not a lot of TV pilot writing books. Stage 32 member Bill Taub has one of the few. http://www.billtaub.com/automatic-pilot/ I haven't read it, but others on S32 have enjoyed it. Good luck!

@ regina oh my thank you so much