Here is Clip 02 of my previously posted, and now deleted, clip for my book, Chronicles of Atlantis, The Age of Prophecy, Vol. 1...available worldwide on Amazon print and Kindle. Constructive criticisms please....while I like the good, and bad...some folks get carried away and have a problem keeping it professional...Thank you all in advance...check out the clip, and try the book...
Your Stage : My amateur attempt at clip 02, working with the materials I was given. by Abdur Mohammed
My amateur attempt at clip 02, working with the materials I was given.
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Opening shot was great... Except next time, keep the titles and lower thirds text out of it. Would have been much more engaging without that stuff blocking the camera.
Showed the dead body too fast. Should have shown it after the sexy woman, making it more gripping because you are like.... She gave him some lovin... Then BOOM dead body, and you are like "OHHHHHH SHIIIIII, that biotch is crazy!"
Adding onto that, would have been cool if she had blood all over her hands and cigarette. I would have just cut the shot differently is all.
Hallway shot turning to door, Alarm clock, slow push in behind sexy lady's back... Cut to dead body... Back to her, slowly bringing the camera around to reveal her bloody face, smoking the cigarette. Necklace shot. Close up of her looking at the camera directly (breaking the 4th wall) and smiling. Cut to credits (Where you can add your text.)
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Cameron...much thanks for your breakdown....You are truly a professional, and I appreciate your insight. This is great! Best to you.
Your welcome. Hard to get feedback anymore these days, so I was happy to help.
Cameron your assistance was greatly appreciated. You are a true professional. All the best!