Screenwriting : Formatting Question by Renee N. Meland

If he's the only senator in the story then I don't see why you couldn't just call him SENATOR. It might be confusing if there's another senator though. But why not give him at least a last name?

Or a letter..ie Senator D?

No need at all! Especially if you are referring to him as Senator Last_Name.

It might cause issues if you just use Senator. Not because it's technically incorrect, but because most readers will pay less attention to characters with just a title, e.g., COP versus SERGEANT JEFFERS. Giving a character their own name cues to the reader that they are worth remembering.

But again, based on your example of using title + last name, you are more than fine!

Thanks everyone! The character is only important as he relates to his wife. His wife is a main character. He's only in 3 scenes.

Although since it's a pilot I suppose someone could choose to expand his role?

I prefer to give first and last name, sometimes a nickname, Or first and last name and apply emphasis to the last name as you develop the story line.

No. Not necessary. I’ve had characters referred to as nothing more than “barista” or “sergeant”. Unless they are a significant part of your story, it doesn’t matter.

If his the first name appears in dialogue then it is best to include his first name when first introduce him when he first appears on film. Example SENATOR BOB JONES and then I would call him Senator Jones after he was first introduced.

If you want to keep his name a secret or want to save it just leave it out. As long as you know for now.

Me personally, I would label the character just senator if it's a small passing role. Unless as Jody said it's a bigger part then assign a name.

Yes. The reason you use names is so actor will know what to do or when to talk.

Pamela. Yes.

I wouldn't even use OFFICER DECKER: I would introduce him as HAMMER (40), burly in full police regalia ...

Yes Doug way works.

Pamela Bolinder I like DECKER, strong name lol.