Hey, I was wondering if i can have some help with a logline? It's for my Viking Series Script. This is what i have so far.
Seeking revenge for their father’s murder, two Viking brothers learn to use the power of the gods.
However, only one of the brothers has the abilities so i've been trying to come up with something.
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Consider: what's at stake if they don't get revenge? what's the main obstacle? Other than being Vikings and brothers what else should intrigue us about them? (ie An amputee Viking and his genius brother...); Or HOW will they use the power? (and against an individual or a group?)
After an amputee Viking and his seer brother discover the unlimited powers of the gods, they plot to use it to avenge their father's murderers, but those assassins may have secret powers of their own that will destroy not only the lives of the brothers but their entire village. (A little long, but you get the idea. Start long and then trim down.) Good luck!
Thank you
Basically the brother is jealous of him because he has special abilities to connect with the gods and he makes a deal with the king to betray his brother
Thanks Gary, this is helpful. I need to think a bit more harder on the logline. But his brother becomes jealous that he has special abilities and makes a deal with the King to betray his brother.
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After their father's murder, two Viking brothers turn to the power of the gods to enact revenge, but end up turning on each other instead.
Thank you Nick :). That is very helpful :). I will give it another go and post it in the group :).
That's such great advice from Nick (I'll be applying that too, thank you) Also this;
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z4a9JRjP86Q&feature=emb_logo
Two brothers invoke the power of the gods in order to avenge their father's murder.
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Try this - "Two viking brothers seek revenge for the death of their father but when one brother discovers he has a mystical power, the other's wrath turns into jealousy."
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@ Michael I agree with the concept @Anthony put forward, to use the inadequacy of second brother to cause conflict rather than dismiss idea from script as a weakness.
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I agree. Anthony has provided another layer of conflict for your screenplay.
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Two brothers seek revenge for their father's death, but only one can use the power of the gods to finish the job.
Wow, thank you all for the helpful advice :).