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D.R.E.A.M. / VALERIA NOIR SPIN-OFF

D.R.E.A.M. / VALERIA NOIR SPIN-OFF
By Daniel Danitto

GENRE: Action, Crime
LOGLINE:

After top agent Valeria Noir leaves the field, D.R.E.A.M. crumbles under its own mistakes. Now the agency needs new blood to rise from the ashes, before a mercenary mastermind turns its shattered network into a global threat.

SYNOPSIS:

After Valeria Noir retires from the field, her former mentor Victor Freeman takes command of D.R.E.A.M., an elite covert agency fractured by corruption and betrayal. Determined to restore its former strength, he recruits a new task force: Steven Norris, Valeria’s disciplined yet conflicted brother; Taylor Cassidy, her streetwise protégé who owes her everything; and the Velkovi sisters, fearless Eastern European operatives balancing impulse with precision.

Their mission is to dismantle F.L.A.S.H., a rogue network led by mercenary Radomir "The Machine" Spasov and his hacker lieutenant, Philip "The Tape" Foroff, a cyber-criminal duo capable of destabilizing entire nations. As the agents race across Darr City, Eastern Europe, and beyond, they uncover evidence that D.R.E.A.M.’s downfall was not caused by its enemies but by the ghosts of its own creation.

In a world of shifting loyalties and weaponized truth, the new generation of D.R.E.A.M. must decide where they stand, with the mission, the system, or their own humanity.

Marcos Fizzotti

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Maurice Vaughan

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Maurice Vaughan

I like the title and concept, @Daniel! I think you only need the first sentence in your logline, and I suggest adding what the former mercenary wants to do and the stakes:

"After D.R.E.A.M. is sabotaged from within, a new generation of agents rises to confront a cyber-militarized syndicate led by a former mercenary __________________ (what the former mercenary wants to do and the stakes)."

If you want to keep the second sentence, I suggest explaining the end ("the greatest threat may not be out there but already among them") in more detail.

Nathaniel Baker

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Daniel Danitto

Thanks, Maurice Vaughan, for the feedback. I made some adjustments. This project could stand on the shoulders of my main one, Valeria Noir, since I envisioned it as a spin-off. If Valeria ever gets the chance to be produced, this would serve as a kind of continuation. For now, it’s just an idea, and I’m not rushing to write the script yet.

Maurice Vaughan

You're welcome, Daniel Danitto. I think your logline is better, but it's really long (60 words). I suggest keeping your logline to around 35 words or less.

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