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An edgy comedian on the fast track, falls from grace after suffering a tragic loss and struggles to find the motivation he needs to bring joy to others before succumbing to his own illness.
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Jackie Carol was on the verge to stardom until tragedy struck and now he is without guidance, without will power and his career as a comedian is becoming nonexistent.
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Logline needs punctuation to become clearer, Jeremy
Did you film this one?
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When an edgy, up-and-coming comedian swiftly falls from grace. He is now faced with a choice between succumbing to his illness or learning that laughter may in fact be the best medicine of all (34 words) ....??
I added in the choice or dilemma he may be faced with, sorry if i took some poetic license and if it's not correct!
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Not bad; keep developing it. Characters are good, we want to see more how they change. You can expand and make the script 100 pages and it can be ready. Maybe one more surprise, turning point
Michael
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Thank you all for your constructive criticism.
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Please continue with this...sounds like you’re on track to revealing a beautiful story here.