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THE BEAR TRAP
By Stevan Šerban

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

When a man tries to commit suicide in the forest, there is a little girl scout and finds him smoking a last cigarette.

Austin Film Festival, finalist

THE BEAR TRAP

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Hunter Bay

Rated this logline

Byron Olson

Rated this logline

Rutger Oosterhoff

When a man trying to commit suicide is cought by a girl scout... {what happens ?}

Tom Lassu

While a bit on the nose, this variation on the Angel saving a life theme (think "It's a Wonderful Life") is worth exploring. Since working with children and animals is a firm production No-no (that's a double), I'd love to see a dozen variations in logline form. Change the characters, but keep the Angel and Victim roles.

Replace the troublesome extra (the dog) with something manageable, like a pizza delivery guy. Brainstorm 5-10 different situations and locations (abandoned house, ghetto, beach, restaurant kitchen, etc).

Loglines are pitching instruments aimed at producers, not to be confused with taglines aimed at viewers. Thus, the end has to be revealed. The correct logline is:

"When a man tries to commit suicide in the forest, a girl scout comes by and changes his mind."

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