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Excellent. Leading me where you wanted me to go, I saw the basic idea of the ending coming, though I was afraid it was going to be a lot worse. The last line took me by surprise. Well disguised. Very good.
Thanks Richard. This was a risky one. I know the dialogue could go over a few people's heads. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Hey man. Really liked the short. My only suggestion is that there should be something tacked onto the end, either him revealing that Tori slipped him her number, or maybe Tori and the dude drive by and she gives him a wink. Something that lets us know that his plan actually worked and that he's not just being delusional. Really enjoyed it, though. Do you have any plans for this?
Ah, comments on my scripts. Again, thanks Stage32 for not notifying me. What's up Jazmen, Nah I don't have any plans for this. I don't know any director's looking for looking for stuff like it. I am considering posting it on INKTip though. @ Lisa, Yeah I heard about Astro when that first came out. Thanks for the review.
@Lisa, she smiled at him during the performance, not after he got his stuff jacked. I think we need to know she still feels that way even after he got himself embarrassed. @Jean-Pierre, I'll keep my eyes and ears open. There's tons of directors out here always looking for good material to shoot.