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CATSAWAY

CATSAWAY
By Phil Parker

GENRE: Animation, Family
LOGLINE:

(UPDATE: IN PRODUCTION) When a city declares stray animals illegal, a newly-homeless house cat must help a motley crew of street cats outsmart the feline mafioso who stands between them and the safety of a purr-fect new home.

SYNOPSIS:

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CATSAWAY

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Brian Shell

1) put a comma after "illegal" 2) frightened is redundant (newly-homeless implies it already and is a stronger descriptive) 3) take out "before they all get taken away" - So for me, it'd read "When a neurotic city bans orphaned animals, a newly-homeless house cat helps a motley crew of strays outsmart the mafioso feral fat cats who stand between them and a purr-fect new home."

Brian Shell

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Brian Shell

To me, this is Isle of Dogs... but with cats. (good descriptions - "It's like X... but with Y")

Nathaniel Baker

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Debbie Croysdale

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Debbie Croysdale

Hey Phil seeing this has cheered me up. What a cool idea. I'm not a kid but already sucked into this and can't wait for its release. Heh Heh I'm a Cat Fanatic! I do agree with Brian that there must be a comma after "illegal." Your logline is great but my personal take would be

"A city declares stray animals illegal and a newly homeless cat, must help feral outlaws to outwit the executioners, before they all lose the chance of finding safety in a new home."

ENCS. My own photo of feral outlaws I collected when I worked in Scandinavia oil and gas. I'm on your page!

Debbie Croysdale

Pic will not download sorry.

Johnathan Burns

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Phil Parker

Thanks for the suggestions Brian Shell and Debbie Croysdale

Brian Shell

Phil Parker I published a book for Kindle and in paperback titled "100 Names of Cats and Dogs" if you need some character names inspiration. https://www.amazon.com/dp/1718947380

Phil Parker

The character names were locked down long ago but I appreciate it again. It’s all in the hands of the production company now.

Brian Shell

Consider suggesting a song by The Pussycat Dolls in its soundtrack Phil. I think this Catsaway is a great idea btw...

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