THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES

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BUILD

BUILD
By Jess Waters

GENRE: Drama, Romance
LOGLINE:

Theo is a reclusive writer who goes to her father's cabin to get away from her jaded life, but Rosa shows up, and Theo doesn't quite know what to do with a woman carrying a shotgun.
 

Jorge J Prieto

Would love to know the stakes. Can you add a "but..." Create conflict, in the logline, expectation. Hope this helps.

Jess Waters

Thanks for the advice, still working on how exactly to word it, but will keep playing around with it!

Jorge J Prieto

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Jorge J Prieto

You getting it. Try to describe her tremendous fear of guns, so the reader can ask themselves, "I wonder why she fears guns so much?" Is it a phobia or did something happened in her pass as it relates to guns??? Mmm.. Get it?

Wayne Jarman

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Charlotte Talley

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Pamela Bolinder

A writer takes refuge at her father's cabin when a gun-toting woman unexpectedly shows up.

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