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By Jess Waters

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

Four siblings search for clarity after their mother informs them that she is terminally ill and plans to die the following day with the help of her wife.

SYNOPSIS:

Connie and Sweet invite their children - Michael, Fritz, Beck, and Hortense - home in order to tell them about Connie’s illness and offer them a chance to say goodbye. One by one, the Loomis children arrive, each carrying the weight of their own secrets on their shoulders. The build up to the big dinner is tense and it highlights the underlying struggles between the children. When the news hits, chaos ensues, as Beck draws a gun and threatens to shoot Connie before she has a chance to make the choice herself. While Beck takes his motorcycle and escapes to a dive bar, Hortense, Beck, and Fritz give chase in hopes of bringing Beck home to settle things for good. With the kids gone, Connie and Sweet must deal with their conflicting feelings and try to find a way to accept the inevitable.

Kyle Climans

Rated this logline

Kelley Christene Watson

I think your logline is great. I am still learning how to write one. Who would think one sentence could be so difficult?

Otto Dean

Sounds great. Nothing I would add or change.

Otto Dean

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Christine Capone

Maybe instead of clarity write that they try to come to terms that their terminally ill mother chooses a "forced death"?? Just a thought : )

Tyler McAlister

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Tyler McAlister

Would love to read this! Great logline.

Rutger Oosterhoff

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Rutger Oosterhoff

Good first basic idea.

A few thoughts:

a) This story is about the consequenses of the lead dying. I don't see them.

b) At www.logline.com they would, in this case, almost 'literally' say: "You just buried the lead with her wife."

c) Clarity=Life's purpose

d) Great title!

Christine Capone

Or maybe not. I don't know why she doesn't respond to comments.

Rutger Oosterhoff

Sorry Christine, did not see your note. Being part of the logline "come to terms" is much better than""life's Purpose".

Jess, there's much response in a very short time. That is a good thing! We don't bite... I hope...

Christine Capone

Sorry Rutger that wasn't directed towards you. Jess has not responded to anyone's comments.

Christine Capone

Then again, maybe she's not looking for feedback.

Jess Waters

Sorry, guys, I am looking for feedback! Certainly will change it to "come to terms" and trying to figure out a way to include all major characters in the logline, but perhaps that's the current issue with it. Not sure about the "forced death" line, but right now this logline feels a lot like a place holder - which I'm trying to work through

Rutger Oosterhoff

Burying the lead means ending the logline focussing on someone else than the lead.

Mark Mccoy

great job. Jess I can see where your going with this.

Christine Capone

Definitely a new and interesting concept. Good luck with it!

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