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Preying on the fear that every woman is terrified their abuser will come back into their life, Jimmy portrays the night of his fourth birthday, and the return of his dead father in an unexpected way.
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"My name is Jimmy, I am three, tonight my daddy murdered me"
Jimmy is a young boy growing up with meager means, he is gentle and kind-hearted but has a vivid imagination and a sad, haunted quality to him. He internalizes his emotions but when alone expresses them prodigiously through his toys, worrying that his abusive dad may be returning to his life. Even after his mother reassure's him of his safety as the father is now dead, Jimmy is still unsure. The night of his fourth birthday party, Jimmy peaks over the stairs in anticipation. He falls, but seems to be okay...until.
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I read your script last night. Enjoyed it thoroughly! A part of me wished it was six pages longer so we could see more of Jimmy's relationship with his mother, however it was short, sweet and straight to the point. No time was wasted. The ending was terribly sad, but it's very fitting for the genre. Jimmy's voice over narration is chilling.