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By Robert James Atton

GENRE: Horror

A film students screenplay becomes a blue print for murder

at prestigious college campus generating a bloodbath to 

uncover the truth of a mysterious relationship.

Elisabeth Johanna Bennenbroek

This happens also in real life, when we look at students bringing in arms to schools, or like in Norway, where people disliking other colored people, get in a blind attack. Is not just happening in the camp with Jason Burgess

Phil Clarke

Not a bad start, but could be less vague esp. re: "mysterious relationship". Also, watch your grammar and spelling and missing indefinite articles.

Robert James Atton

At a prestigious college, a student writes a screenplay..... I like that start. It sounds much better. I'll work at this. Thank you all for your feed back. Very much appreciated.

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