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A film students screenplay becomes a blue print for murder
at prestigious college campus generating a bloodbath to
uncover the truth of a mysterious relationship.
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This happens also in real life, when we look at students bringing in arms to schools, or like in Norway, where people disliking other colored people, get in a blind attack. Is not just happening in the camp with Jason Burgess
Not a bad start, but could be less vague esp. re: "mysterious relationship". Also, watch your grammar and spelling and missing indefinite articles.
At a prestigious college, a student writes a screenplay..... I like that start. It sounds much better. I'll work at this. Thank you all for your feed back. Very much appreciated.