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COUGARS

COUGARS
By Cody MacGrath

GENRE: Horror
LOGLINE:

Following an invite to stay with eight beautiful women, a young college student becomes increasingly suspicious of their motives as it all sounds too good to be true.

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Dustin Quinteros

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Dustin Quinteros

All the elements are there, but the order could be tweaked and simplified. I'm having a similar problem with my short... "Following an invite to stay with eight beautiful women a young college student becomes increasingly suspicious of their motives, as it all sounds too good to be true." ???

John Theroux

8 women? You're right - too good to be true.

B A Mason

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Mark A McKee

Concept is mirroring ‘Red State’ with the set-up, which isn’t a bad thing, but the logline still isn’t giving me much in the way of what differentiates it from films with a similar premise.

The only other piece of advice I would give is in the poster attached. While it’s certainly worthwhile to dream of developing a Blumhouse picture, this is still presumptuous and could serve as a red flag to producers as this can make a writer seem quite “green.”

Cody MacGrath

Hey, Mark. The poster was just made in good fun. It's a fan-made poster. Not something to take seriously.

Nathaniel Baker

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