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GOOD PEOPLE
By Rob Jones

GENRE: Crime, Drama
LOGLINE:

A Man returns home 10 years after being the center of a crime ring that he got away a changed person with but local Law enforcement aren't buying it. 

James Barber

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James Barber

What would help to hook me more on this is to know what is at stake for your protagonist. Is he going to be pursued and potentially jailed for crimes he didn't commit? Are they going to ruin his life as he will always be under a microscope? Also... what is the protagonist going to do about things? Is he going to spend his time trying to convince the authorities, family...friends that he is rehabilitated? Does this force him to try and clear his name by finding the real perpetrator(s) to keep his freedom? Without overstepping my bounds... maybe consider something along these lines.

When a series of crimes begin following the release of a man who was once the center of a crime ring, he must now convince the local authorities that his ten year incarceration has resulted in a changed life before he returns to prison for crimes he didn’t commit.

When a series of crimes coincidentally begin to occur following the release of a man from a ten year incarceration as the center of a crime ring, he must now find the true perpetrator before local authorities return him to prison.

I like the possibility of the story, just tweek the logline to catch and keep people's attention so they want to know more about the story. A small change will greatly improve the rating! Good luck.

Olanrewaju Giwa

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