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FOLLOWING SOCIO PATH
By Monica Mansy

GENRE: Thriller
LOGLINE:

A suspicious prosecutor's investigations of a cheating fiancé lead to several women... all very dead, but when his latest conquest is still missing she must uncover his true identity before becoming his next victim. 

Dustin Quinteros

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Dustin Quinteros

The "police" must ignore their instincts when the sister of their number one suspect uncovers her fiancé's secret life. (could you be more specific than police i.e. Detective Smith, or "An experienced Detective must..."?) :)

Monica Mansy

Thanks for the insight and feedback, Dustin Quinteros!

Louisa Kendrick Burton

Monica Mansy I think you have too many people in the logline to know who to follow. Here's a template to start with: When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE], or else (or before) [STAKES]. Hope this helps.

Monica Mansy

Hi, Louisa Kendrick Burton! Thanks so much for the feedback and template!

Noel Thompson

"When a criminal defense attorney suspects her fiancé of infidelity, clues lead her to several women...all very dead, she must investigate who her fiancé really is, without becoming his next victim." Just a try. I like the story idea, and the title. Mostly it's just too wordy instead of punchy right now.

Monica Mansy

Thank you again, Noel Thompson! This is wonderful and positive feedback!

Nektarios Karvounaris

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Lyter Daniel

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Lyter Daniel

Has potential...A little hard to follow

B A Mason

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Monica Mansy

Ha! Thank you, Nick Assunto - Stage 32 Script Services Coordinator! That little cheat sentence really helped me... still revising it, but it’s helped guide me in a big way.

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