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Based on factual events. In the turbulent aftermath of the massive 2010 Haiti earthquake, two young girls become the helpless victims of a predatory cabal. In parallel, a female assassin with PTSD, hell-bent on revenge, meets an ex-cop by chance at an empty house in an elite Washington D.C. neighborhood where they become aware of a disturbing occult party at the mansion next door. They go down the rabbit hole and take matters into their own hands.
Is this based on a Bohemian Grove type cult?
There are several cults and cabals referenced in the script; early-age Bohemian Grove experiences are foundational to the female protagonist.
Highly intriguing though the two parallel plots could be more clearly connected. Also, as a logline, it's on the long side. This is more like a synopsis. If you'd like further feedback, do by all means get in touch.
You're right, it's more of a mini-synopsis than a logline... the "parallel" plots blend together on page 6 and are clearly connected. Have you read the script or just the synopsis? Btw- thanks for your comments.
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