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A married woman very unhappy from not marrying a Mr. Right, becomes infatuated with a successful married business man she sees every day at a local bus stop. Her infatuation turns into an obsession of crazy attempts to win this man, only to learn that his heart was never really into hers, only to discover that a different Mr. Right's heart is.
Your logline is missing inciting incident. Use 3 acts structure in your logline just like what you do in script writing.
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