THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES

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ONCE UPON A TIME IN TOKYO
By Stephen Floyd

GENRE: Action, Crime
LOGLINE: A Japanese businessman is murdered by yakuza on his wedding day and it's up to the businessman's widow and a nameless drifter to find a motive and exact justice.
Lio Cloud

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Lio Cloud

I like the parts, its not 100% clear how they connect. "who killed him" seems redundant. Yes it is relevant but not something you can squeeze in a log line. One has to ask "how are the yakuza near a civil war connected to the widow and drifter?"

Nathaniel Baker

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Brian Shell

What kind of Japanese businessman is he? Use one flavorful word to color him in a bit more.

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