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I NEED A LIFT

I NEED A LIFT
By Maurice Vaughan

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE: After the funeral of his wife, an on-demand driver reaches out to his passengers about his grief, but none of them care or have time to talk to him about it.

SYNOPSIS:

Ultra low-budget Drama

Tagline: Passengers aren't the only ones who need a lift.

Theme: Take time to reach out to those in need.

I'm posting this script to showcase my writing ability and sell the script.

The script and full story rights are available for purchase (low price). Please message me through Stage 32 or Storytelling200@gmail.com. Thanks!

The Synopsis:

Ryan White returns home after his wife's funeral. He tries to find someone to talk to about his grief, but no one is available.

Ryan goes to work as an on-demand driver (similar to “Uber” or “Lyft”). He tries to talk to his customers about his grief, but they either don’t care or they have their own problems.

Ryan picks up a businesswoman named Sunshine Sanders. He breaks down and cries. She wants to talk to him about his grief, but her life is falling apart, so she doesn't think she can give counsel to anyone, and she's in a rush for a big dinner meeting with a big potential client. She eventually agrees to talk to him. They bond as they talk. She briefly tells him about the problems in her life.

Ryan drops Sunshine off at the restaurant for her big dinner meeting. They exchange contact information so they can stay in contact.

Later that night, Ryan gets a call from Sunshine. She tells him she signed the client. She thanks him for the lift to the big dinner meeting. He tells her, “I was the one who needed a lift."

Other Details: 2 major characters, 4 minor characters, and most of the story takes place inside of a car.

Photo of driver by JÉSHOOTS (used with permission through Pexels.com).

I NEED A LIFT

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Anthony Salvatore Garrone

Rated this logline

Brian Shell

Kinda sounds like My Dinner with Andre on wheels... at least, it could be easy to film yourself.

Something to consider...

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for rating, Mr. Garrone!

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for commenting, Mr. Shell. Thanks for your suggestion about filming the script. I just looked up "My Dinner with Andre." It looks interesting.

Brian Shell

I have the MDwA screenplay. My first book (which is still unpublished due to privacy concerns) was a book of internet dialogue... back when email was a big thing and before the World Wide Web... the "Golden Era of the Internet as my co-author called it.

Kay Luke

Tense is wrong.

"When an on-demand driver whose wife just died can't find anyone to talk to about his grief..."

needs to be

"After an on-demand driver's wife dies and he can't find anyone to talk to about his grief..."

And don't say "talk" twice in the same sentence, It's awkward.

The Log is all over the place. It's not clear if the story is about the Driver or "her". You have what you need, just lose the superfluous words and be more succinct.

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks, Mr. Luke. I see your points. I'm working on rewriting the Logline.

Maurice Vaughan

How does this sound, Mr. Luke: "After the funeral of his wife, an on-demand driver reaches out to his passengers about his grief, but none of them care or have time to talk to him about it."

Kay Luke

Rock n Roll!

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for helping, Mr. Luke.

Brian Shell

I suggest watching Collateral by the excellent auteur Michael Mann - Tom Cruise and Jamie Foxx

Maurice Vaughan

Thanks for the suggestion, Mr. Shell.

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