Thank you for rating my Loglines Nathaniel Baker.

Thank you for rating my project John Dionne.

Tasha, here's something that someone else told me once: A logline is a single sentence description of your story that is usually 40 - 60 words. But shorter is better. It contains: - Who - Dilemma - Action - Goal - Villain (add irony if you can). The best of luck! I love the idea!

Thank you for sharing your recommendations Bianca Y. Michaels. The logline standard is one line but there are exceptions. Especially when it is a bio or true events. In this case, it’s my story.

Thank you for rating my loglines Mary Johnson.

As prose, it's a decent passage, though a bit repetitive. However, it's not even close to a logline. It tells us nothing about the hero, story goal, arc, struggle, or stakes. Yes, there are a couple of different ways to structure a logline, e.g., high-concept vs. character arc, but using a paragraph of prose describing a single moment in a single scene is not one of them. Bianca Y. Michaels's advice is spot on, except for the length. Loglines should aim to be somewhere between 20-40 words; if they're longer than that, the concept's impact will be lost in the flurry of words.

Thank you Nate Rymer for rating my loglines.

Thank you for rating my loglines Phil Parker. The standard for loglines are based on the information you listed but there are exceptions. When the story is true and Faith Based, the super natural happens. The story is true and Faith Based. God wanted me to tell this story. I will keep you posted!

Tasha Lewis I always have trouble with the loglines. (I hate that word! :-D) It's like a synopsis of the synopsis. Yours is very poetic, but doesn't fit industry standards. But you know what -- standards are made to be broken. :-) Good luck with an original idea!

Thank you John Richard Sullivan for your rating and feedback. I’m humbled by the ratings because these were my first loglines for this script. Normally, I do several rewrites but I wanted to paint a picture or share a experience.

Thank you for the generous rating Kim Simons.

Thank you Micah, Vikram and Chris for rating my longlines.

Thank you for rating my project Jose Peres. Each time I look at the photos of the tree, I remember that day.

Yesterday when I walked by the tree I saw an image like this https://mistycopeland.com/images/.

Thank you for rating my project Manuele Bonafede.

Interesting.

Thank you for rating my loglines Ben Suchman.

Thank you for rating my project!

As Bianca Y. Michaels said: A logline is a single sentence description of your story that is usually 40 - 60 words. But shorter is better. It contains: - Who - Dilemma - Action - Goal - Villain

Thank you for your comments. I follow the guidelines; however, when the story is high concept and compelling, there is wiggle room for exceptions.

Thank you for rating my loglines.

What is the life of this dancer? How did she get stuck in a hurricane? I would like to know what the main character's weakness is and what her goal is in the story overall.Is the entire story about her surviving a hurricane?

Please rate it now or wait for my edits Maria Restivo Glassner. In answer to your questions, when I realized that I had survived this. The only thing I did was thank God. When I look at the photos of the tree that now has grass growing on it in the shape of a dancer, the script will define the rest.

Ah, so this is your character's defining "aha" moment you are describing. I will wait to rate after edits because a defining moment for a character is very different from a logline. It is the kernel that the logline could come from but not the logline itself. for example "After miraculously surviving a hurricane, a ( insert adjective about dancer here) goes on a journey to ( insert goal here). Something like that. There has to be a goal in the logline.

Thank you! I like the sample. Would you mind if I use it? I discussed my survival but not the whole process.

I’m working the edit today. My loglines describe what happened. Remember this a Faith Based True Story. The script consultant, selected dancer and myself will work on it jointly. The collaboration will be based on our combined input.

No problem! Sorry just saw your response.

Maria Restivo Glassner Thank you for your continued support!

Thank you for rating my project Thoko Zulu.

I'm really intrigued. Would be a difficult task to get the emotion I get from what your saying into a 35 word or less log-line.

Thank you for rating my loglines Gen Vardo. It would be a challenge but I could if it was required for grading purposes; however, since I have pictures of the tree with grass on it in the form of the dancer that grew after the experience, I believe the reviewers of my loglines will give me a little wiggle room.

Thank you for rating my project Egi David Perdana II .

Update

Trailer being viewed in a focus group.

Premise sounds interesting, but you've got a lot of issues with tense changes, typos, etc. Clean those up and condense to make it tighter. Good luck.

Thank you for your rating Kevin Lewis.

Would the experience be more emotional in the

Present

Past

Combined tenses

Thank you for rating my loglines Nicholas Esposito.

Thank you for rating my loglines Ethan Alexander.

Thank you for your feedback Todd A McGee. I changed it to past tense and conditional.

Thank you for rating my loglines Arthur Charpentier.

Thank you for rating my loglines Onwukwe Abraham Ongonna .

Just a quick note, sorry if you already know this Tasha. If you press the @ key, you get a list of peoples names related to the thread. That way when you ask someone a question it notifies them so they can reply. Again sorry if you already know this.

Thank you for rating my loglines Ryan Johnston.

What I absolutely love about this Tasha is that you boldly did something different. Creativity should never be pigeonholed, IMHO it stifles originality and different POVs. Sooner or later everything will start to look the same. There's always a price to pay for your way, but it is worth it! I know, you know the rules, so it makes this so precious. Love it, love it, love it! :-D

Thank you for sharing and the rating!

Can I read this script?

Thank you for rating my loglines Renata Elis. Jake Rutigliano the script is a work in progress. The dancer selected will be collaborating with the script consultant. If you would like to discuss it or be involved in the production, we can discuss that.

Thank you both for rating my loglines. It would be nice if this would show up on my Wall as well.

Thank you both for rating my loglines.

As others have commented, by industry standards it is too long. And as others have commented, rules can be broken. Wishing you the best with the project, Tasha, on this resurrection (Easter) Sunday.

Thank you so much for your candid commentary and observations. I appreciate them. Since this is a true story, I wanted the reader to feel what I felt. I guess you could call it a out of body experience or virtual reality moment. The selected dancer will collaborate with the script consultant. Dancers, being one since the womb, feel things differently. Lastly, I have almost lost my life and health several times. God’s not done with me yet.

Thank you for rating my loglines!

Thank you for your rating! Any recommendations?

Thank you for rating my project! Any recommendations?

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Love the title "The Tree That Saved a Life", but the logline is too long IMO. Have you tried condensing it down a bit? Focusing on the tree and the dancer and the storm? You can then elaborate more in the synopsis. Just my recommendation.

Thank you’ll for rating my loglines.

"After a dancer survives a hurricane with nothing but her arms and a single strong tree, she is spiritually awakened to find the path that will lead her to the love of her life."

My apologies for missing these two requiring a response. Maria, thank you for your commentary. I hadn’t thought about it like that. I’m sure the actor/dancer who is casted will consider your insights. Thank you Volkan for the rating.