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By Cannon Rosenau

GENRE: Romance, Comedy

After the fairy tale wedding, a newlywed woman has trouble letting go of her fantasies of what married life would be like.

Phil Clarke

Not a bad start at a logline, but you really need to be communicating a little more about the conflict, who or what she's up against and the stakes that face her. At the moment, this is merely describing the chief protagonist's character flaw. If you'd like a free logline helpsheet I put together for my clients, do send me a message.

Cannon Rosenau

Thank you! I am in the beginning phases of planning the story. Like way beginning and exactly what you said is exactly how I feel.

A longer gist:

Back from her honeymoon after the wedding of her dreams, Margo can’t wait to live her best married life with her new husband, Alvin. They’re going to make passionate love every night after a long day at work, linger in bed and feed each other strawberries and drink champagne in their perfectly clean new house. Instead, she finds herself next to a farting, tired husband after eating takeout and downing a 24 ounce fountain soda.

The plan is to toggle between fantasy and reality. But you are correct, I stopped writing a summary because I don't have the story or conflict yet...basically, you know I need that pesky little thing called a plot!

Nathaniel Baker

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