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THE BOTTOM LINE
By Jill A. Hargrave

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

New York City, 1988. ATN News is #1 in the ratings! The news team prides itself on providing viewers with reliable, fact-based news reporting. Then a business tycoon acquires the American Television Network, demands the news team produce “Infotainment” to increase ad revenues, and threatens to bust the union if they don’t comply. With job security on the line, what to do? STRIKE!  But is the news team fighting a losing battle?

Nathaniel Baker

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Jill A. Hargrave

Thanks, Nathaniel.

Jason Mirch

Hey Jill, this is a great start that could just use a bit of tightening. It feels like the opening of a synopsis and a logline mixed together.

You could start with something like, "When a business tycoon acquires the American Television Network and demands the news team produce “Infotainment” to increase ad revenues, they are faced with the decision to comply or risk their careers and strike."

Jason Mirch

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Jill A. Hargrave

Thanks, Jason. Great feedback. I'll work on it and repost.

Jill A. Hargrave

Hello Jason, I have a new version of my logline for The Bottom Line based on your suggestion. Is it OK to post it here or just under my Profile Loglines? If you have time to go to my profile, I would appreciate you feedback on this new version. Thanks.

Jill A. Hargrave

Hi Jason. I've posted a Version 2 logline for "The Bottom Line." Any feedback would be appreciated.

Jim Catizone

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John Ellis

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John Ellis

There's no connection to a character - stories are about people, a character the audience can relate to. Re: Silkwood - a social issue (at the time) told through the eyes of one woman. Also: Norma Rae.

Jason Mirch

Hey Jill A. Hargrave I did not see where you posted your Version 2. Can you let us know where it is?

Jill A. Hargrave

Hi Jason, Go to my Profile and click on Loglines. It titled, "The Bottom Line - Version 2"

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