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THE TWO SHADES
By Jill A. Hargrave

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

When a naïve, rambunctious teenager muscles in on her sister’s singing career in 1963’s England, her dream of stardom fizzles out as she succumbs to the excesses of a Rock’n Roll lifestyle, ends up pregnant, and after a botched illegal abortion, has to re-evaluate her life to halt her downward spiral.

Nathaniel Baker

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Jill A. Hargrave

Thanks, Nathaniel.

Jill A. Hargrave

I would appreciate feedback on my logline for "The Two Shades." Thanks Studio 32 Members.

John Ellis

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John Ellis

This is better than The Bottom lIne logline - at least characters are mentioned. But remember, a logline is NOT a story description. It's a marketing tool - designed to get people to read the script. A good format for a logline is: MC faces a problem (best if the Antagonist is mentioned) and is the only one who can solve it.

Kiera Giordan

It's too long in my opinion. I would shorten it to "When a rambunctious teenager muscles in on her sister’s singing career in 1960’s England, her dream of stardom fizzles out as she succumbs to the Rock’n Roll lifestyle."

Kiera Giordan

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Jill A. Hargrave

Thanks John and Kiera for your feedback. This is very helpful.

Nick Assunto - Stage32 Script Services

I agree with Kiera Giordan. Strong beginning, just cut the excess at the end.

Jill A. Hargrave

Thanks, Kiera for your suggestion ans Nick for his feedback.

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