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By Clark Ransom

GENRE: Action, Sci-fi

Eighteen years after the apocalypse, a boy raised underground by a robot makes his first human contact: a young girl running for her life.


“Survive? We were sealed off. After a few weeks, the microbes ran out of people to eat.”

Hunter is celebrating his 18th birthday with the only parent he knows: a robot named RHET.

He also just met his first human... a teenage girl running for her life.

Unknown to the teens, RHET secretly helps the Scientist responsible for the apocalypse kidnap Hunt in order to extract his DNA: a lie he claims will save humanity.

Being schizophrenic doesn’t help.

The two teens escape and flee back to RHET who reveals that he has been manipulating them all along. Uncharacteristically conflicted, RHET is left to make a most human decision: Kill his creator or the creation.

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Angela Cristantello

This is a really really good start, Clark! It would be helpful to know that much more about who Hunter is within this logline (Like, he's schizophrenic!? We'd love to know that! That tells some significant story!) And we're also missing what the obstacle is and what the stakes are. The environment is clear (and it's great), the inciting incident is clear (and it's great), we just don't know what the protagonist wants NOR needs to overcome, and we're not sure what the "or else" is here. Once those things are highlighted, this logline is gonna start to sing :)

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