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SECRETS IN THE WOODS BETRAYAL OF ARFABELE

SECRETS IN THE WOODS BETRAYAL OF ARFABELE
By Dragana Stjepic

GENRE: Drama, Fantasy
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Emily, who murdered her best friend's mother from the witches' land now has to face the consequences of those actions as the Dark Zal is coming for her revenge resulting in losing the only friend she had. Emily is trapped between two wars, two different forces, and the government trying to steal their powers for their own greed. Power comes at a price, will Emily be able to manage her rage and win the correct war?  

Wilmer Villanueva

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Nathaniel Baker

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Dragana Stjepic

Thank you!!

William Gunn

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William Gunn

The concept is interesting but the Logline is way too long. It should only be two or three sentences max. What you have is the Synopsis. I was guilty of that myself in the beginning.

Pat Savage

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Pat Savage

The story is great but as William Gunn says the logline should be much shorter. Thumbs up on both books. Sounds like a film trilogy with the third book you are planning!

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