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LONG TIME COMIN'

LONG TIME COMIN'
By Matthew Parvin

GENRE: Drama
LOGLINE:

A man decides to end his life and takes a nostalgic train ride to his seaside hometown for his finale. Along the way, he is entwined in the escape attempt of a young woman and her mother from human traffickers and seizes on an opportunity to try and make what's left of his life count for something.

SYNOPSIS:

Bradley Herring has come home. A former schoolteacher in Los Angeles, he returns after enduring an unimaginable tragedy. He lost a student to violence. The trauma of that day, and his own culpability in it, haunts him day and night. Bradley Herring has come home because he can’t live with it any longer. He’s come home to die. He boards an Amtrak passenger coach heading west to the seaside town of Manistee, where he was born and raised, to end it all.

Tamar Tennyson and her mother Brenda are being loaded onto an Amtrak train headed for Detroit t the same station. Their captors, Henry and Kevin, are sending the women for the purpose of selling them in the city. At the last moment, Tamar breaks away from her captors with the help of Brenda. The ensuing chase winds through the East Lansing Train Station. It culminates with Tamar stowing away on a bi-level passenger coach heading for the seaside town of Manistee, Michigan.

Tamar and Bradley connect, first with her attempting to hide in his first-class cabin. Then she tries to rob him. Problem is, she's not a very good criminal. She's sixteen and scared. Bradley's seen someone similar before. With Henry and Kevin driving the highways of Michigan in pursuit, Bradley recognizes a child in trouble and must decide whether or not he can make a difference in this teen's life before his is over.

LONG TIME COMIN'

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Tasha Lewis

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Jim Boston

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Clarence Sharpe

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Xaviera Iglesias

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Xaviera Iglesias

I love the concept of this one. It's like Taken on train tracks.

Jeelan Syed

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Sean Francis Ellis

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Sean Francis Ellis

This is a strong idea that I can visualize easily. I prefer the set up in the synopsis above, in which he is haunted by a tragedy and considers suicide his only option, as opposed to the attached pitch document, which has him terminally ill. The first is a bit more hopeful.

Jelica Zdravković

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Jelica Zdravković

I love the idea. It seems so intense and easy to imagine.

Eric Smith-Gunn

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Jill Godley

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Oriana Zängerle

I like the concept of everything happening on a train. From a director ' s perspective I would try to add some contrast, some lightness to the very dark topic of looming suicide and a trafficking victim in need. Does he find his will to live again? Anyway, a promising premise!

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