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Three guys have one day to pack the penthouse of an S&M dominatrix.
SYNOPSIS:
After arguing over which key unlocks the front door, RICK, STAN and DAVE stumble into the penthouse they have one day to pack. Rick, the smart one, is pissed they're late for the job he worked hard to secure. Stan, Rick’s over-weight best friend, showcases his clumsiness by immediately breaking a doorknob. Dave, Rick’s younger brother and dedicated stoner, celebrates his discovery of the bathroom, “Found the shitter.”
As Rick packs and Stan shares his lack of courage with women, “They make me nervous," Dave gets bored and converts a bathroom tampon into a manpon - a tampon for his penis hole. Stan laughs, but Rick’s pissed. He grabs the tampon, prompting a tampon tug-of-war, causing Rick and Dave to unintentionally dry hump, knock over and break an expensive vase.
As Dave jets to the store for glue to fix the vase, anxiety-ridden Rick practices breathing techniques while Stan shares his wish to make real love with a woman, something he never did with his ex-wife. When Dave returns with glue and a fresh cut on his arm from falling down, he fucks up again and accidentally bleeds on the expensive, white couch. Rick explodes, screaming at Dave, “What’s next? Piss in the sink? Shit on the floor? Jerk off in the fridge?”
Beyond irate, Rick’s IBS surges. He shuffles his way to the bathroom, offering Dave and Stan a chance to get high on the balcony outside. Stan hedges, but Dave presents a win/win, “Did you know getting stoned helps you relax when you talk to women?”
A few hits in, Dave eyeballs two lovely ladies on the street below. Plotting to get digits, Dave convinces Stan to throw them his clothes so they can "stand out". Stan, excited to grow courage, tosses his wears and announces, “I just threw my pants to some girls. Holy shit!” As Dave and Stan go back inside, the girls chuck the clothes in the garbage.
Rick, back from the bathroom and enraged Stan and Dave are stoned and half-naked, yells at them to get dressed, “I’m dead fucking serious about this.” Searching for clothes, Stan and Dave break into the bedroom, but discover an S&M dungeon instead. Paddles, leather toys and dildos galore. It’s a life-altering experience.
Clock ticking, Rick pleads with them to pack, but the S&M dungeon has sparked a fire in Stan. He has a mid-life crisis in the living room, screaming about wasted days of lost love with his ex-wife.
Rick, with zero compassion, mocks Stan, provoking Dave to insult Rick, driving Rick to tape Dave’s mouth shut, while Stan runs around screaming. They break into a fight with tape, plastic wrap and beat each other with a massive dildo from the dungeon.
As the men lie in a heap of pain, VALERIE the dominatrix gets home. She sees the mess and takes control like a true dominatrix would yelling, “Don’t fuck with me. My heel broke today!” She gives Stan a testicular check-up granting him some courage, she plays dirty teacher for Dave helping him learn, and she paddles empathy into Rick forcing him to grow a heart.
By nightfall, Valerie offers the men a second chance to pack the penthouse and they realize evolving is a choice they make, not one they wait for. Maybe men aren't idiots all the time.
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