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DARK WORLD
By Michael Keeling
A young adult struggling to gain respect in a world where all things supernatural are lurking, he needs to find his roots before living his life.
SYNOPSIS:
Michael born with an enlarged heart and learning disabilities is finding it hard living in this world. After finding out his family comes from a long line of witches, his attempt to find connections and learn more about his ancestors, the help he gets is minimal. No one likes outsiders and he needs to gain people’s trust before he can move on with his life. However, suffering with anxiety this becomes a difficult task in hand. His powers trigger when panic attacks emerge, and this puts people off in helping him.
In the meantime, he loves music and plays the drums. After forming a local heavy metal band, he meets a family of Vampires who are intrigued by his personality and abilities as a witch, he becomes close friends with them. Now having someone behind him to help find his roots things take a nasty turn when he discovers something dark about the Vampire family.
The discovery that he makes is the vampires are in fact trying to use his powers and the connection between them is so powerful the vampire family take advantage of it and try to take over the town as their own, however this takes a different turn when he finds a witch’s coven who knew his entire family and are his family from his ancestors.
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Maybe a little more about your guy? I want to know who he is, at least a little bit. Keep going!
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Hi Michael,
I am not sure if this story plays out in a fantasy world with supernatual creatures, or is a story about an autistic man strugling to gain respect in a world where everything 'feels' like 'supernational' because there are so many unspoken social rules to follow in a unforgiving, polorized, world -- where often "kindness is mistaken for weakness"(Keanu Reeves) .The latter is the story of (almost) every autistic man/woman, and very powerful to tell if you tweak it the right way so it will interests a bigger audience.
One of many possible logline/story examples to give you an idea:
"After losing his parents in a horrific car accident [inciting Incident], a lonely autistic man must find a friend to stop himself from slipping into a made up fantasy world"
You just need your INCITING INCIDENT and CONCLUSION -- whatever you think is cool!
Best, Rutger
Thank you for the advice all :). I shall think of something and change it :). I like writing Fantasy, so this story will be in a Fantasy/Supernatural world. I do have a synopsis so I can post that if needs be.
Rutger Oosterhoff Synopsis now posted.
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Thanks Michael, will read!
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Rutger Oosterhoff What do you think?
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HeyMichael. I like the basic story. But the question I asked myself was "why does he be friend f\vampires as we know that normaly vampires are the bad guys/girls. I mean before it is revealed that this bunch in fact is using the protagonist. ..?
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Rutger Oosterhoff They actually befriend Michael, but Michael thinks he has made friends when infact they're agaisnt him. So they're still the bad guys.
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The character Michael and the world are FANTASTIC and I definitely think you could find an audience for them. For your logline - you really want to highlight the tangible goal that will drive them through the story, and what they'll be up against. "Roots" could be literal or metaphorical here, so make sure that you're clear :)