I read the logline and a synopsis. I want to see it on the cinema screens as soon as possible. This is an exciting story

Thank you, Emilia.

Not saying that your synopsis doesn't have the answer, but what is it that makes your zombie film different from others? The logline is missing that hook at the moment and falls short at the final yard because of itthis. Love the title btw.

Thanks, Steven.

It seems as though society has collapsed due to this virus, and yet one of the characters is able to perform the high-tech task of developing a vaccine, and do so on his own? Good luck getting any producers to buy into such a far-fetched plot hole.

Firstly, one of the heroes did not create the vaccine on his own, and secondly, read the script before writing stupid criticism.

Mr. Buzzell. Maybe you should read the script first before giving silly criticism to this project. I've read a lot of scripts and watched a lot of good movies. Even if this scenario is not original, but where did you notice the plot hole? I see that lately you often criticize the wonderful projects of this author. Did he offend you in some way?

Anyone who can't withstand criticism of their work isn't going to last in this business. Try submitting this script for industry coverage and see what kind of reaction you get. My comments are intended to help you improve your work. If you never want to re-write any of your scripts, then you're in the wrong business.

Francis Lawrence's film "I am a Legend". The hero creates a vaccine alone. Is this also a plot hole?

Thank you, Richard. But I ask you to read the script first, and then write an objective criticism. I just want to understand exactly what the plot hole is. You see, this can't be a plot hole, since the hero doesn't create this vaccine alone.

Plot holes in 150 million dollar movies are not like plot holes in spec scripts from unknown writers. Producers can and will reject scripts for having unlikely scenarios, even if that same scenario has been used before in a successful movie. If you want to sell a spec script, it needs to be bullet-proof.

The log line is confusing and muddy. Clean it up and simplify the journey. Your treatment is good but the log line is not serving it well.

Thanks, Jon!:)

Awesome logline. Have you considered changing the word "people" to be more specific. Like "a group of strangers" or "friends" whatever the case may be?

Thank you, Lleeya! They are more friends than strangers. It will be necessary to add this clarification.

There are some errors in the screenplay. You should have that looked at.

What about: "The lives of a group of well-meaning individuals takes a dark turn when attempts to deliver a cure for a virus leads them into an unexpected confrontation with zombies and delusional, militant anarchists"? I dunno. Just thinking through it a bit. I think what you have is pretty good though. Just seeing if it can be strengthened a bit.

Thanks Derek! I'm still thinking how to improve the logline and script.

I gave the logline a 3 star, mainly because I think it could be cut down a bit. It's good, but you can make it great. Here's what I see as a start.: A group of friends work to deliver a vaccine that will save humanity. All that stands in their way are one million zombies.

Best of luck to you.

Your synopsis could also be cut down. Remember, Hollywood doesn't like to read. Also, as many will argue, a title can sell a script or send it to the dumpster. If I had to decide to see the movie based on title alone, it would be a pass. I initially saw the title, "Path through Death" as being a bit more of a hook.

Final thought. Coverage, coverage, coverage. I feel my current script is so much better after two coverage reviews. One was by my former instructor of 15 years ago. I sent in an earlier version, that I wasn't happy about, to a contest that also offered coverage. That version is currently a quarterfinalist in Table Read My Screenplay. Point being, I believe a script is never finished until it's on the screen.

Thank you, Ron!

Thanks Phil! You helped me a lot!