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THE UNEMPLOYMENT LINE (A SHORT)
By Janet Caulfield
A disgruntled manager at the unemployment office is having a really bad day. First there's the dirty geese, then the slobs in the parking lot...and to top it off? One of his employee's is feeding them! It's a comedy expressso. A bold blend of "The Office and Seinfield with a shot of "How I met Your Mother."
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A disgruntled Manager at the Unemployment office is having a really bad day. First there's the dirty Geese, then the slobs in the parking lot...and to top it off? One of his employee's is feeding them! It's a comedy expressso. A bold blend of "The Office and Seinfield with a shot of "How I met Your Mother."
THE UNEMPLOYMENT LINE (A SHORT)
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I figured since you read mine, I'd look at yours :P I really like this concept... However, what you have are not really loglines. A good template for loglines is something like this: "After ______________, a ______________ must ____________." Try fitting your logline into something like and see where it takes you. Great idea though.
Good advice Gary, Thanks