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THE BATHTUB

THE BATHTUB
By Chris Donald Griffin

GENRE: Comedy
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A life of luxury, excess, and pride, acquired through ill means, results in real estate mogul, Giorgio Wright, finding himself injured and trapped in his own bathtub. In a dangerously vulnerable state, and with his reputation on the line, Giorgio must escape, unexposed.

The poster was created by  OLEH HOLYZOV.

SYNOPSIS:

A life of luxury, excess, and pride, acquired through ill means, results in real estate mogul, Giorgio Wright, finding himself injured and trapped in his own bathtub. In a dangerously vulnerable state, and with his reputation on the line, Giorgio must escape, unexposed.

54-year-old Giorgio, is a Goliath in both real estate, and in stature; he commands both respect and admiration. Money, power, women, and a cheese tray that knows no end, are all his. There is nothing Giorgio won't do, to satiate his hunger.

One night, Giorgio invites all the who's whos in town over to his penthouse to celebrate. Drinks, drugs, Giorgio's hefty table dances, and a runaway goat dressed up like a jester, make for great times. The guests leave, and Giorgio is left alone, in an empty penthouse, with his wine. An explosive up-spurt of wine, erupts from the spout of the bottle, and drenches Giorgio.

A drunk and depressed Giorgio, stumbles into his Jacuzzi, to wash off the wine. He nearly drowns, after passing out in his bubble bath. Giorgio attempts to climb out of his tub, slips, enters into a mad barrel roll, and crashes arm first into his bath tub. A loud crack is followed by a booming scream.

Lying injured and trapped in the tub, Giorgio's only lifeline is his half-witted AI assistant, Tabitha. Giorgio's initial instinct is to call an ambulance, but what will happen to his reputation if word gets out? He then enlists Tabitha's assistance in contacting more discrete help.

The night only gets weirder and weirder, As Giorgio's less-than-legal past comes back to haunt him. He's forced to hide his bathtub situation from prostitutes who are sent up to his penthouse by his casino owner friend, Jodie Hamilton. He attempts to coerce a crooked cop, Sergeant Reynolds – who launders drug money through Giorgio's properties – to help him out of the tub. Giorgio eventually enlists the help of an animal rescuer, whom he once scammed through a dog show charity. The rescuer, Abdullah Yusuf, accidentally dies in a failed attempt to lift Giorgio out of the tub using a porpoise hoist.

The night comes to a climatic end, when a group of Giorgio's crooked cop collaborators attempt to gain access to his washroom, to assassinate him. Giorgio manages to ignite an electrical fire, setting off the alarm, which over-rides a computer hack the cops used to disable Tabitha. The fire department comes to his rescue, but the damage is already done. Giorgio is saved from the tub, but his true legal troubles are just about to begin.

Emily J

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Emily J

I REALLY like this logline, I think you could change the second sentence I've heard a couple execs giving notes in lives in the Writers' Room say they don't like words like "must" or "forced" because they're overused, but it's SO hard not to! I'm wondering if there's a way to incorporate parts of that sentence into the first one and then shorten the second one? I'm not sure. I just love the reveal of the bathtub and the imagery and I'm trying to decide how much more info you need to give.

Chris Donald Griffin

Emily J , I came up with this logline earlier today. I actually put it off for over six months. The screenplay itself was a weird challenge I gave to myself, and I was shocked when members of my writing group requested to read it, and ended up enjoying it. I'll give your notes some thought. Finding the right words for loglines is a unique challenge.

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Julia Warren

That's an interesting point about the (over-)use of 'must' etc ; what about turning the closing sentence into a question ? I.e.: 'In a dangerously vulnerable.....etc - can Giorgio escape, unexposed?

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Mark Ferland

You can get this into one sentence and nail it. Keep hitting it and you'll get out of logline hell!

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