Well lemme tell you something. Long story short. I had spent so much money on pitch sessions only to be left in an echo chamber where somebody says.
Tell a clear story from beginning middle and end — Sammy warshaw.
Be vividly descriptive with the characters feelings and emotions. Don’t generalize them. — Theresa Gallagher.
To now this bullcrap.
I followed every advice.
But this.
This is just a rant.
And the only thing that’s fair about it is the fact that I didn’t explain the legalities of it in the why now section.
About how I wanted to make this project just so I can make EA stand out in the film industry as much as the video game industry.
About how I wanted to make this as a blueprint for respawn’s show to save creative time and their money in creating it years before it releases.
Making it release sooner and faster.
But other than that.
She just acted like your typical blacklist reader.
I won’t even mention her name for how terrible she is.
And besides it’s a psychological thriller.
And even though she knows that. She doesn’t know that psychological thrillers especially psychological thriller novels. Actively use vivid imagery and symbolism and articulation to make for a more powerful psychological thriller experience.
And that’s why I came here. To find a representative that read scripts for the story and that aren’t pedantic.
Because to put it simply.
My scripts are inspired by Quentin tarentino’s screenplays.
And stage 32 was founded not to be blacklist.
But to be better than blacklist ever was.
So screw blacklist.
I respect the persistence here. You’ve clearly invested real time, money, and effort into these pitch sessions and into continuing to refine the project instead of giving up on it.
I’d just be careful not to let frustration with the feedback keep you from extracting what might be useful in it. When several people are responding to clarity, story, or presentation, that doesn’t necessarily mean the underlying idea is bad. It may simply mean the idea you understand so clearly in your own head still isn’t reaching the person across the table in the same form.
That distinction matters. You don’t have to agree with every prescription a reader gives you, but their confusion is still information. If someone can’t tell what Elliott is doing for two hours, the useful question may be, “What did I think I communicated that they didn’t receive?”
Same with the IP concern. You may already understand how you intend to handle the legal side, but if the pitch leaves the listener wondering whether the project can actually be made, that question becomes part of the pitch problem whether or not you already know the answer.
You’ve already demonstrated that you’re willing to keep working at this. I’d use these sessions for exactly that purpose: not as verdicts on the project, but as evidence about what is and isn’t getting across. Protect the core of what you’re trying to make, but stay curious about the places where people consistently lose the thread.
Yeah. But I dunno. What is clear for someone else isn’t exactly what defines clarity for another man.
And that echo chamber just annoys me.
Any advice on that would be helpful.
If not.
Then that’s okay.
I understand what you mean. Clarity can definitely feel subjective, especially with psychological thrillers where ambiguity can be part of the experience....
I usually find it helpful to separate intentional mystery from moments where the audience may simply lose the thread. What part of your script are you currently most unsure about?
Just look at my recent post. And no I’m not uncertain about any script. I’ve already figured it out.
Just look at my pitch document that I just posted here to see if I’m really in the wrong or not.
And if so.
There better be reasonable explanations for this.
Manhattan Travolta , my friend, When you say "Just look at my pitch document that I just posted here to see if I’m really in the wrong or not." I want to encourage you to look at it differently - is it more important for you to be right, or is it more important for you to get produced?
It’s more important for me to find out the truth. That’s what I want. The truth. Not what I wanna hear.
I just want a representative…. Nothing more nothing less.
Well, my dude, it seems the "truth" that is available is despite how clear the project is to you the aspects that representation is highlighting as unclear to them are standing in the way of you gaining representation. As frustrating as it is let go of that frustration and take the notes and adapt. The money hasn't been a waste - you're paying for education.