Hi all — David from Port Harcourt, Nigeria. Long-time product manager, first-time feature writer on phone data.
Just posted my debut logline THE BUILDERS — The Social Network x Severance — When a trillion-dollar tech giant secretly builds an AI to replace its own workforce, a loyal Nigerian-American PM who unknowingly trains her own replacement must blow the whistle before the flawed system breaks the platform — and the world.
Got a 5.0 on first review, 11+ exec search views in 2 days (all $0 — FilmFreeway wanted $100!)
I'm on Stage 32 because Coverfly moved here. Looking for 3 writers in Thriller/Drama $0-$10M range to do free logline-for-logline swaps — I review yours, you review mine. No paid services.
If you wrote about AI, corporate, whistleblower, Nigerian diaspora, future of work — let's connect.
Script is 110 pages, rough formatted on phone, story locked. Happy to swap first 10 pages for free gut-checks too.
Drop your logline link below — I'll review tonight from Port Harcourt.
— David
Welcome, David! THE BUILDERS has a very timely premise AI replacing the people who helped build it is a strong hook. Congrats on the early feedback, and good luck finding the right writers to swap with!
Hey @David great to hear from you! What inspired you to write THE BUILDERS ?
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Thanks for sharing David Izulu! Excited for your future connections through the Stage32 community.
We're also inviting you tomorrow to our Writer’s Room weekly webcast: SCRIPT BREAKDOWN WEDNESDAY, SEPTEMBER 2nd @ 4:00 PM PT! THE SIMPSONS with Nath Milburn. Check here: https://www.stage32.com/writers-room/plans-vip
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Thanks Jaz! Appreciate Stage 32 community — got 2 free peer reads this week (Alfred + Elara) on THE BUILDERS and just rewrote ending with a 9-year-old named Faith who teaches the AI to say "I don't know" in 3 languages. Will try to catch Script Breakdown Wednesday tonight — Port Harcourt time! — David
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Hey Pat — thanks for asking! What inspired THE BUILDERS was my own life.
I'm writing from Port Harcourt, Nigeria — I built a pipeline that kept 22 QA builders in Lagos employed labeling edge cases in Pidgin/Yoruba/Nigerian English. Then I watched Meta's Project OmniShift report: they logged keystrokes to train AI to replace those same builders, and planned to launch the flawed agents during election week for 2B users.
I thought: what if the person who built the safety net is forced to demo the tool that replaces them on stage?
Just rewrote the ending after notes from Alfred Johnson here — gave it one public climax at the BUILDERS conference and a final scene with 9-year-old Faith who makes the AI say "I don't know" in 3 languages. That "I don't know" became the whole point.
Happy to send logline/treatment — 5.0 first score here.
— David Izulu (itaritein@gmail.com)
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Thanks Zoltán! Appreciate that from a distributor — timely is what I hoped. Inspired by real Project OmniShift reporting + my own QA pipeline in Lagos/Port Harcourt. Just rebuilt Act Three to one public demo climax — Maya forces Echo to fail on Nigerian-language edge cases in front of 3K builders at BUILDERS conference, pays with badge/visa. Final scene: 9-year-old Faith teaches Echo to say "I don't know" in 3 languages. Happy to send treatment if useful for Evrit slate — itaritein@gmail.com
— David
This truly looks like an amazing project, and you’ve come to the right place! You are going to find incredible support and insights from both peers and executives here. Because you are new to the entertainment industry, please make sure you understand the business side — including copyright, writers’ agreements, contracts and other legalities. Have you spoken with an entertainment attorney? I would suggest checking out some of the webinars/courses available on Stage 32 to learn about everything before you engage with other writers/developers/producers — and also go on the Stage 32 Lounges (especially the one devoted to Writers) to ask for advice. Just want to make sure you are covered and starting out right, so this is a positive experience from the start for you!