Introduce Yourself : Joe Trlica: Screenwriter by Joe Trlica

I am new to Stage 32 and screenwriting. I am a retired university professor and have several comic stories to tell. So, I decided to write a few screenplays. My first attempt at a movie script is near competition and I have a draft logline that I would appreciate some help on. Thank you. Genre: Comedy Logline: A bumbling grandfather arranges a do-it-yourself African safari that grandmother is sure will be the end of the couple and their two teenage grandkids. They encounter numerous dangerous animals and situations on this hilarious driving trip through Kenya.