Greetings everybody my name is Gaijin. This is the first draft of a one-shot manga I'm working on for the summer. It'll be my first manga.
Throughline: A warrior whose suffered tragedy recalls what he fights for.
If anybody's interested I'd really appreciate a couple eyes to look over it and give some feedback. Primarily I wanna focus on character, making sure the main character, Proto, is interesting and genuinely engages the reader.
The theme used for his character is loss and subsequent vengeance. The evil that grief can drive a person to commit when not properly handled.
Viewer discretion is advised for violence near the latter half and injury of a minor. If you're sensitive to that then I advise caution.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vbKJZYK6sCZwbRTWGBMI6vAR7aOoCZiRSrtA...
For everyone who gives it a look, thank you so much. I'd be happy to get your feedback in the comments here on Stage 32.
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Hi Heavenly Gaijin! Thank you for sharing, though I'm not a manga expert! I know some people who are and will defintley share this with them! I have to commend you for taking on such a format and storytelling style because for me the genre is so much more different is terms of pacing but from I can grasp your characters and theme clearly!
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Thank you Comrade. I really appreciate you sharing my work. It your friends get a chance please have them comment on Stage 32 or send feedback to my email inspiredartisan0616@gmail.com.
Thank you so very much.