Hello everyone, I now have the first three episodes of a TV show, (Grady's War), nearly complete and ready to put in front of some folks in Hollywood. Before I do I would like to get some impressions from my peers. I don't need a full critique or anything, I have a teacher and mentor who is helping me with that. What I really need is some fresh eyes to read it and give me their impressions. Both me and my mentor have been reading and re-reading these scripts for awhile now and there's no telling what we might be missing because we are so close to the material. The show is a science fiction alien invasion story. My twist is that the invasion parallels the European colonization of the Americas. The aliens came, traded some tech, and asked to build a few cities for the purpose of trade. Then they slowly took over. The series takes place 374 years after the aliens arrive and they have already assumed control of the planet with humans either adopting their culture and living in their cities or living a primitive lifestyle in the wilderness. John Grady, one of the humans living as a rancher and farmer in the wilderness, goes to war over a contract breach. The first season is the story of this war. The inspiration for the war is Red Clouds War, a conflict between the United States and the Sioux nation. Red Cloud's War is the only conflict between the US Army and Native Americans in which the Natives won. My series retells this historic event in a futuristic sci-fi setting. It is full of action, intrigue, and drama. And best of all, it has the ring of truth since it has all happened before. So, if you are interested in giving it a read I'll be happy to offer the same service in return. Just PM me with an email address and I'll send it to you. Thanks in advance, Trey
Screenwriting : Reader's Needed - Grady's War - TV Pilot by Trey Wickwire
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Hey Trey! Sent you an E.
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Thanks man
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Trey! Your coverage is amazing. Thank you so much for taking the time to be so thorough. I'll be returning the favor Monday. I look forward to Grady's War.
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My Step-Son is Anthony Graywolf Herrerra (imdb him, ... he's done Cowboys And Aliens, John Carter, The newest Lone Ranger, etc. He's a gifted Horseman/StuntMan/Stunt Rider at any rate...(i digress) We lived on "The Rez" and I believe I am catching an insight to what you're looking for..... I would consider it truly a gift and rare opportunity to read your material. Anxiously awaiting your reply. e2
Thanks Shawn, take your time. Ed and Alle, Thanks and PMs have been sent.
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I'd be happy to read and give feedback, if you are still looking for readers.
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Thanks to the folks who have read the script and provided feedback. It's exactly what I needed. :-D
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My feedback is headed your way in a few!
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Got it, thanks man, just what I was looking for.
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Damn, dude, you're good! Thanks for the new award-winning advice on KINGSTOWN, Trey. Those are great ideas. Exactly what I needed.
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Thanks again for all the feedback, Shawn Speake and Melinda M. Dus have been especially helpful. I recommend them to anyone who needs some good peer feedback.
Hello Trey - if you like feedback from someone in Asia (Singapore) - I'm available. Cheers!
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Check out www.indystockscreen.com It's an International Screenplay Competition with review given with your submission!
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Whew, back from a business trip so I'm late in saying thanks to the latest batch of reviews. Thanks everyone, for all the help, its been so beneficial.
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Thank you, Trey, for allowing me to read and comment. I agree with Shawn - you're good.