Screenwriting : End it or continue? by Alexandr Khlopenko

Thanks for reply, Kathryn. It's about being stuck in one surreal situation (see groundhog day) but that sometimes it can't be changed - and the situation repeats two times in differrent ways but to the same result. I feel like the rule of three is applicable here, or should it stay the two times to give a more unfullfilled and disturbed feeling.

Thanks , Jim, it means a lot. I know that I should work on my skills even more.

You should step away from it for a while. When you come back, you will probably see exactly what it needs. It doesn't take a few days to write a script.

I like the concept Alexandr, like it could have been a Twilight Zone episode. It needs work on the execution, grammar, format and so on but the story is good and I don't think you need to change that except for the daughter part. To me it seems as though you have two totally different stories coming together in the one place. John is stuck in this infinite loop. We know there is any number of earlier versions that we don't need to see and we will assume there will be any number of later versions to come but I think if you're going to mix in another story about Uncle taking his daughter as his wife, then you probably should explain a connection to John's story, otherwise, simply change it to Uncle enslaving his wife. Heidi, it's a short and shorts can be written in any length of time (as features can as well). One of my 5 page shorts took two and a half hours from concept to first draft and that draft was sold to a producer and filmed last year.

Thank you so much, people, after I finish it I'd be extremely greatful if you could give it another look to point if the changes helped and if I'm on the right track. Thanks again everyone.