Hello, I am currently working on this concept for a feature comedy script. I would welcome any feedback you may have on this logline. CAMPAIGN TRAIL: A young Midwestern Congressman must travel with his rival for the White House, a veteran East Coast Senator, in the ultimate road trip reality show. Thanks, Gerald Hanks
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So both characters are presidential hopefuls? My questions are how are they different and what are their character traits beyond beyond Midwestern v. East Coast and the age gap. Is one character the "bad guy" and one the good guy? It would be much more powerful if we're strongly rooting for one person to win the election over the other. The difference between the two should be very clear. Also is this during the primaries or during the actual election? In either case, you run the risk of losing half your audience because of political bias.
Hi Dave, Thanks for your comments. This is just the logline. I go into more detail in the synopsis, such as why they're traveling on a bus together for a reality show. The humor will come from how the two sides, who see each other as polar opposites, are not as different as they think. Thanks again. Gerald Hanks Story Into Screenplay www.StoryIntoScreenplay.com