Your Stage : Logline Opinions Please! by Marquis White

I'm not sure about novel loglines, but do you need to say that it's an action/adventure novel? I feel like it takes away from your logline, but that's just me. Also, no need to put quotation marks around the word "saves". The idea that the devil is our best hope against a forgetful god destroying us is funny on its own. You don't need to go out of your way to point out the irony.

I'd make it a bit shorter and tighter: An action novel involving a God plagued with amnesia discovering the world will be destroyed by HIMSELF unless the devil steps in!

Interesting! But it could tell me more without the unnecessary punchline. A good rule of thumb for loglines is to follow the formula of laying out your acts: Start with the catalyst/inciting incident: "When a god discovers the world is about to be destroyed by his own hands..." Then go into your act 2 - what does he need to DO?: "... he must work against time to save the world from himself..." And end with act 3 - how is he going to do this? Who is trying to stop him, what happens if he fails? "...and stop his twin brother from consuming the world in fire." Or however it works. It's a bit sloppy as I don't know your story, but a proper logline should either REALLY entice me with it's high-concept nature (think EX MACHINA, "A programmer is selected to evaluate the human qualities of humanoid A.I.") or give me a clear map of what the film is going to be about.

A bit too 'Christianity' for my taste and "end of the world" stories are over-saturated. "X-Men: Apocalypse" followed the same plot. 2 forces come together to save themselves and humanity... again.

You're going Love my profile then @dan Max! Marquis, I like it. YOU are the creator, take advice but know what weight of mentoring is worth carrying and when to drop it my dear. I certainly am intrigued with the concept regardless of what Genre it is targeting. You will do well with it, I'm sure. No one can dictate your imagination. It belongs to you. Erik Grossman is one of the best to go to for advice on anything :~). Take his and run with it and every blessing and success to you.

Important question: is the story finished or in the writing? Or its logline just sampled for feedback? Well, I think there is something odd in the god discovering a world about to be destroyed/ he wants to destroy the world. The word "discovering" can go with amnesia, yes. But there is no way he can find out about a dying thing and at the same time wants to destroy it, there must be a reason and purpose for destruction. This doesn't suit the concept of amnesia. Instead, the god woke up and discovered a super corupted world and wanted to destroy it. The devil became the saviour as he was forced to understand the balance of good and evil. Again, you should call this comedy. Its incredibly hilarious for a god to have a memory loss.

Thank you for the responses. @Dan MaxXx, the story is not favorable for any religion, but your response provides insight. @Christian Pius, the story is written. It's in the editing stage, being prepped and tested before shopped for agents. And seeing as agents are brutal from the logline, I want to put this out and get opinions for insight into my project.

@Coreeta I love the spirit behind your words. I'll look into your Eric Grossman recommendation!

@all of you. Thank you

To be honest it gets a little muddled around "discovers that world is on the verge of destruction, because he will destroy at". Might wanna try some like "A god with amnesia discovers that he is inadvertently causing the destruction of the world ... And the only one who can save it is Satan himself".